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Many schools are arranging unpaid work for teenagers to get some work experience in institutions or companies because it is beneficial for students as well as institutions .to what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many schools are arranging unpaid work for teenagers to get some work experience in institutions or companies because it is beneficial for students as well as institutions. bKeB
These days, it is admitted by few inhabitants that the plenty of schooling are going to organize some unpaid work especially for juveniles, due to it can helpfull teenagers to develop both, such as new skill and build relationship. I agree with given notion and this essay depict both the view in following paragraphs with suitable examples. To commence with, there are several merits for both students and companies, if school authority arrange it. At one set, they can develop new skills, like a communication, time management and so on. As a result, in the near future students will not face much issues to get jobs. Secondaly, they can build new relationship with companies workers and learn more new things, before they did not khow. As a they can easily find job from helping of those workers. For instance, a couple of years age our school organize huge job workshop, at that time I met few of them works and became friends, then, after complied my graduation I had need a job during that time them helped me a lot to find job. Moreover, here are some demerits of arranging unpaid work for students. Albeit, school authority ought to arrange skills and profection development class instead of no cost work. Because of, if
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by few inhabitants that the
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plenty
of schooling are going to organize
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some
unpaid
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work
especially
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helpfull
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teenagers
to develop both, such as
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new
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skill
and build relationship. I
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agree
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notion and this essay depict both the view in following paragraphs with suitable examples.

To commence with, there are several merits for both students and
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companies
, if school authority arrange it. At one set, they can develop
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new
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skills
, like a communication, time management and
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so
on.
As a result
, in the near future students will not face
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much
issues to
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get
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jobs
.
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Secondaly
, they can build
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new
relationship with
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companies
workers and learn more
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new
things,
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before
they did not
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khow
.
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As
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a they
can
easily
find
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job
from helping of those workers.
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, a couple of years
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our school organize huge
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job
workshop, at that time I met few of them works and became friends, then, after complied my graduation I had
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a
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job
during that time them
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helped
me a lot to find job.

Moreover
, here are
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some
demerits of arranging unpaid
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work
for students. Albeit, school authority ought to arrange
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skills
and
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profection
development
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class
instead
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work
.
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IELTS essay Many schools are arranging unpaid work for teenagers to get some work experience in institutions or companies because it is beneficial for students as well as institutions.

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3 paragraphs
212 words
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