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Some people think that in developing countries the education system is not good but others think the reason is lack of material. Discuss the both view

Some people think that in developing countries the education system is not good but others think the reason is lack of material. Discuss the both view nNnxg
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IELTS essay Some people think that in developing countries the education system is not good but others think the reason is lack of material. Discuss the both view

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