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Some people think that hosting an international sports event is good for the country, while some people think it is bad. Discuss both views and state your opinion.

Some people think that hosting an international sports event is good for the country, while some people think it is bad. o2ab
Sport events have been ingrained in our societies from ancient times. It lets people represent their countries, display their physical abilities and bond with their fellow competetiors all at the same time. Hosting international sports events goes as far back as ancient greece where olympics began. Such events have always made for a lovely time for the people; not only the participants but the spectators as well. However, some people believe that these huge, international events are a nuisance, a waste of resources better spent elsewhere. They believe that these events achieve nothing but, give young people a chance to boast their physical prowess over others and leave behind rubbish for others to clean. While true, it is also true that these large scale events give countries a chance to boost their economies. These events generate thousands in revenue and employment opportunities for the country they are held in. In my opinion, sports events have been a fantastic way for countries to bond with each other. These events not only create revenue for the country itself, but they also motivate their spectators; especially children, to take part in various sports.
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in our societies from ancient times. It
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represent their
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countries
, display their physical abilities and bond with their fellow
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competetiors
all at the same time. Hosting international
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sports
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events
goes as far back as
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ancient greece
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olympics
began.

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events
have always made for a lovely time for the
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people
; not
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the participants
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the spectators
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However
,
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some
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people
believe that these huge, international
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events
are a nuisance, a waste of resources better spent elsewhere. They believe that these
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events
achieve nothing
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, give young
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people
a chance to boast their physical prowess over others and
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leave
behind rubbish for others to clean.

While true, it is
also
true that these large scale
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give
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countries
a chance to boost their economies. These
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events
generate thousands in revenue and employment opportunities for the
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country
they
are held
in.

In my opinion,
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sports
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events
have been a fantastic way for
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countries
to bond with each other. These
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events
not
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only
create revenue for the
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country
itself,
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they
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IELTS essay Some people think that hosting an international sports event is good for the country, while some people think it is bad.

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