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Some people think that hosting an international sports event is good for the country, while some people think it is bad. Discuss both views and state your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

It is believed by some people that arranging international sporting events is such a good inititative because it can create the international fame and name. On the other hand others believe that it has negative impacts. However, my assimption is that everything has both advantages and disadvantages and it has no exception, thus I would like to clarify both negative and positive aspects and establish my perception towards it. First of all it should say international events such as football and cricket world cup, olympic can bring extra ordinary fame and superiority for a country. Economy and structural development is interelated to this events because these sporting events can earn huge amont of money. Besides a noticeable number of unemployed person can get the opportunity of wor due to these arrangements. For example, Qatar is going to arrange Football worldcup in 2022 in their country and a big and wonderful stadium has been built dut to these even t and huge number of unemployed people can get their job in this event. At the same ti me this event may promote Qatar as a hosting country and people all over world can be interested to visit it. In other words tourist income also willbe increased and all the players who will participate in the event will promote this country to watch the sports. Moreover, the economy will be improved in the way that a majority number of people will cost money due to watch these events. In addition the hosting country is admired by international people for their hospitality which is one of the major acheivemenyts of a country. There are few benefits behind this advantages as the natural beauty can be hampered due to the rapid number of people and city can also be polluted. Besides, the local people cannot get the opportunity to attend the wevents because its restricted for the sake of safety. At the same time the poor people can be deprived as govt. invest more money for the purpose of international events rather than poor people. In my opinion I should say promoting international events should be admired and respect the country and these event can help to create friendship and remove malice to others which is necessary. To sum up despite the negative sides we should focus the good side of sponsoring international events as it can create brotherhood and faternity and prevent hostility between others. Comments:
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is believed
by
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some
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people
that arranging
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international
sporting
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events
is such a
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good
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inititative
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because
it can create the
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international
fame and name. On the
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other
hand others believe that it has
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negative
impacts.
However
, my
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assimption
is that everything has both advantages and
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disadvantages and
it has no exception,
thus
I would like to clarify both
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negative
and
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positive
aspects and establish my perception towards it.

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First of all
it should say
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international
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events
such as football and cricket world cup,
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olympic
can bring
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extra ordinary
fame and superiority for a
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country
. Economy and structural development is
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interelated
to
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this
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events
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because
these sporting
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events
can earn huge
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amont
of money.
Besides
a noticeable
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number
of unemployed person can
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get
the opportunity of
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wor
due to these arrangements.
For example
, Qatar is going to arrange Football
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worldcup
in 2022 in their
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country
and a
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big
and wonderful stadium has
been built
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dut
to these even t and huge
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number
of unemployed
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people
can
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get
their job in this
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event
. At the same ti me this
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event
may promote Qatar as a hosting
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country
and
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people
all over world can
be interested
to visit it. In
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other
words tourist income
also
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willbe
increased and all the players who will participate in the
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event
will promote this
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country
to
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watch
the sports.
Moreover
, the economy will be
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improved
in the way that a majority
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number
of
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people
will cost money due to
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watch
these
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events
. In
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addition
the hosting
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country
is admired
by
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international
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people
for their hospitality which is one of the major
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acheivemenyts
of a country.

There are few benefits behind
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this
advantages as the natural beauty can
be hampered
due to the rapid
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number
of
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people
and city can
also
be polluted
.
Besides
, the local
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people
cannot
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get
the opportunity to attend the
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wevents
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because
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restricted for the sake of safety. At the same time the poor
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people
can
be deprived
as govt. invest more money for the purpose of
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international
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events
rather
than poor
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people
.

In my opinion I should say promoting
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international
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events
should
be admired
and respect the
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country
and these
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event
can
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help
to create friendship and remove malice to others which is necessary.

To sum up despite the
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negative
sides we should focus the
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good
side of sponsoring
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international
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events
as it can create brotherhood and
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faternity
and
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prevent
hostility between others.

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IELTS essay Some people think that hosting an international sports event is good for the country, while some people think it is bad.

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
403 words
5.5
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