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Some people think that hosting an international sports event is good for the country, while some people think it is bad. Discuss both views and state your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Some people think that hosting an international sports event is good for the country, while some people think it is bad. aLxX
Sports, in general, is a really good concept. People have to go outdoors and exercise and relax their muscles to have a healthy mind and healthy body. Sports is a way of people coming together and letting out their competitive sides. The best part about sports is that there are abundant choices, for example, basketball, volleyball, tennis, swimming, running, table tennis and many more. Sports create relationships between people, they create trust due to having rules, and most importantly it creates entertainment for us. We get excited and we are eager to watch our favorite team win! So many people come from worldwide to get together and play a common game, where we have high competition and have fast-beating hearts, and adrenaline pumping through our veins, Shouting and cheering on from the bleachers or in front of our screens, all of this gives us excitement in our lives. For some people watching inspiring skilled players who will stop at nothing to secure their win, is a source of motivation and dedication. The truth is, a sporting event is not only for the people, but it also helps the economy and the country. When the winning teams win, it will create popularity for the country, causing more tourists, who bring more foreign currency from the outside, spend enormous amounts within the country, which further leads to the boosting of the economy, causing more jobs, more revenues, and ultimately high living standards. Countries will also have these winning as accomplishments which can help them be more recognized in the eyes of other countries, which further helps them in cheaper imports and many other things. This can also further lead to immigration as now people want their kids to learn those sports, and now there are more skilled professionals in that champion country. But, there are some disadvantages. For example, if the countries government is not strong they might not have proper accommodation ready for the immigrants, or they might not benefit correctly from the booming economy due to weak laws. Also, some players might join other teams due to low income from their national country. All of this and with many more drawbacks, could all lead to failure in the economy and more people living below the poverty line. In summation, I believe that worldwide sporting events are really beneficial for the countries and their citizens, as long as the countries leaders and people are strong. Citizens will be benefiting from entertainment luxury to having a booming economy. So more international sports events should be hosted.
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Sports
,
in general
, is a
really
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good
concept.
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People
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have to
go outdoors and exercise and relax their muscles to have a healthy mind and healthy body.
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Sports
is a way of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
coming together and letting out their competitive sides. The best part about
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sports
is that there are abundant choices,
for example
, basketball, volleyball, tennis, swimming, running, table tennis and
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many
more.

Sports
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create
relationships between
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people
, they
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create
trust due to having
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rules
, and most
importantly
it
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creates
entertainment for us. We
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get
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excited and
we are eager to
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watch
our favorite team win!
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So
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many
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people
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come
from worldwide to
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get
together and play a common game, where we have high competition and have
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fast
-beating hearts, and adrenaline pumping through our veins, Shouting and cheering on from the bleachers or in front of our screens, all of this gives us excitement in our
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lives
. For
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some
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people
watching inspiring skilled players who will
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stop
at nothing to secure their win, is a source of motivation and dedication.

The truth is, a sporting
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event
is not
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only
for the
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people
,
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but
it
also
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helps
the
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economy
and the
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country
. When the winning teams win, it will
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create
popularity for the
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country
, causing more tourists, who bring more foreign currency from the outside, spend enormous amounts within the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
, which
further
leads to the boosting of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
economy
, causing more jobs, more revenues, and
ultimately
high living standards.
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Countries
will
also
have these winning as accomplishments which can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
them be more recognized in the eyes of other
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countries
, which
further
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helps
them in cheaper imports and
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many
other things. This can
also
further
lead to immigration as
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now
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people
want their kids to learn those
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sports
, and
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now
there are more skilled professionals in that champion country.

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But
, there are
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some
disadvantages.
For example
, if the
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countries
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government
is not strong they might not have proper accommodation ready for the immigrants, or they might not benefit
correctly
from the booming
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economy
due to weak laws.
Also
,
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some
players might
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join
other teams due to low income from their national
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country
. All of this and with
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many
more drawbacks, could all lead to failure in the
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economy
and more
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people
living below the poverty line.

In summation, I believe that worldwide sporting
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
events
are
really
beneficial for the
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countries
and their citizens, as long as the
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countries
leaders and
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people
are strong. Citizens will be benefiting from entertainment luxury to having a booming
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economy
.
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So
more international
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sports
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events
should
be hosted
.
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IELTS essay Some people think that hosting an international sports event is good for the country, while some people think it is bad.

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