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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. Are famous people treated unfairly by the media? Should they be given more privacy, or is the price of their fame an invasion into their private life? Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

Are famous people treated unfairly by the media? Should they be given more privacy, or is the price of their fame an invasion into their private life? kko8
There has been always a debate about treating celebrities with fair or unfair behaviour by media. Stars like player, Bollywood people and the government members are always be in reporters limelight, because of their personal life. In my opinion, they also have right to live free of exposing fear. In upcoming paragraphs I will discuss the both views. On one hand, folks with fame are live their life for their fans, but not their families those who are living with them and who can not hold their privacy just because of papparazzi. Sometimes they are can not even spend their quality time to just stay away from public reviews on them. As people see whenever they step out from house individuals like reporters always follow them and that is make them feel uneasy all the time. On the other hand, public also like to see and hear about their private topics. They enjoy their personal gossips more than any important issue that occur in our society. And the media is just doing their jobs to entertain the people in that way. Moreover, reporters are only maintaining their positions while working with stars fame and their lives. It should be noted that, people like Bollywood stars choose to be always in fame, but the celebrities with different fields as from sports are not gaining fame for them, they even serving for nation, but the news channels also drag them in private gossip. It is said that the famous cricket player Virat Kohli got break from cricket just to pamper his wife. Public included media cracked jokes on their personal life that was really shamefull for them. In conclusion, I would like to say that reporters are just doing their duties to give news, but living a peaceful life while spending quality time with family members is each individual's right.
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fair
or unfair
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behaviour
by media. Stars like player, Bollywood
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people
and the
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government
members are always
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be
in
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reporters
limelight,
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because
of their personal
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life
. In my opinion, they
also
have right to
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live
free of exposing fear. In upcoming paragraphs I will discuss the both views.

On one hand, folks with
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fame
are
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live
their
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life
for their fans,
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but
not their families those who are living with them and who can not hold their privacy
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just
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because
of
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papparazzi
.
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Sometimes
they are
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can
not even spend their quality time to
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just
stay away from public reviews on them. As
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people
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see
whenever they step out from
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house
individuals like
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reporters
always follow them and
that is
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make
them feel uneasy all the time.

On the other hand
, public
also
like to
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see
and hear about their private topics. They enjoy their personal gossips more than any
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important
issue that occur in our society. And the media is
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just
doing their jobs to entertain the
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people
in that way.
Moreover
,
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reporters
are
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only
maintaining their positions while working with stars
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fame
and their
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lives
.

It should
be noted
that,
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people
like Bollywood stars choose to be always in
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fame
,
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but
the celebrities with
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different
fields as from sports are not gaining
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fame
for them,
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they even serving
for nation,
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but
the news channels
also
drag them in private gossip. It
is said
that the
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famous
cricket player
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Virat
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Kohli
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got
break from cricket
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just
to pamper his wife. Public included media cracked jokes on their personal
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life
that was
really
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shamefull
for them.

In conclusion
, I would like to say that
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reporters
are
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just
doing their duties to give news,
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but
living a peaceful
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life
while spending quality time with family members is each individual's right.
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IELTS essay Are famous people treated unfairly by the media? Should they be given more privacy, or is the price of their fame an invasion into their private life?

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  American English
5 paragraphs
308 words
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