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Some people think that hosting an international sports event is good for the country, while some people think it is bad. Discuss both views and state your opinion.

Nowadays, many countries are organising mega sports events to improve its economic growth. Some people favours the concept of hosting international sports event by a country, whereas, others believe it is just a waste of time and money. There are valid opinions to weigh both the sides of the discussion, which I will consider in the following paragraphs. On one hand, it helps in providing an astounding improvement in the infrastructure of the city where the event is being organised. It also builds reputation and dignity of the host country all over the world. Then, it encourages tourism and creates bright avenues of employment. Moreover, the host country also earns very high revenue by selling tickets of the event. Eventually, arranging international sports events boost the economy of the host country. On the other hand, such mega events adversely affect daily life of the citizens. Government spends huge amount of money in building temporary infrastructure to provide basic amenities and security to the visitors. Moreover, government further recovers this amount from the residents of the country in the form of direct and indirect taxes. By any chance, if the event does not happen smoothly, it brings blemishes to the prestige of the host country. Overall, I think, in recent years the people’s perception and attitudes have completely changed. Earlier sports industry was least preferred and underrated. But now, due to heavy investments and higher returns, it has become the most lucrative and desirable sector worldwide. Different communities worldwide have started giving respect and recognition to sports and the players as well. Therefore, in order to bring name and fame along with some financial benefits, hosting international events is profitable and acceptable.
Nowadays,
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organising
mega
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to
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improve
its economic growth.
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people
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favours
the concept of hosting international
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sports
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event
by a
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country
, whereas, others believe it is
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a waste of time and money. There are valid opinions to weigh both the sides of the discussion, which I will consider in the following paragraphs.

On one hand, it
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helps
in providing an astounding improvement in the infrastructure of the city where the
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event
is being
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organised
. It
also
builds reputation and dignity of the
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host
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country
all over the world. Then, it encourages tourism and creates bright avenues of employment.
Moreover
, the
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host
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country
also
earns
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very
high revenue by selling tickets of the
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event
.
Eventually
, arranging international
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sports
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events
boost the economy of the
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host
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country
.
On the other hand
, such mega
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events
adversely
affect daily life of the citizens.
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Government
spends huge amount of money in building temporary infrastructure to provide basic amenities and security to the visitors.
Moreover
,
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government
further
recovers this amount from the residents of the
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country
in the form of direct and indirect taxes. By any chance, if the
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event
does not happen
smoothly
, it brings blemishes to the prestige of the
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host
country.

Overall
, I
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think
, in recent years the
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people
’s perception and attitudes have completely
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changed
. Earlier
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sports
industry was least preferred and underrated.
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But
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now
, due to heavy investments and higher returns, it has become the most lucrative and desirable sector worldwide.
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Different
communities worldwide have
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started
giving respect and recognition to
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sports
and the players
as well
.
Therefore
, in order to bring name and fame along with
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some
financial benefits, hosting international
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events
is profitable and acceptable.
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IELTS essay Some people think that hosting an international sports event is good for the country, while some people think it is bad.

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