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Some people think that history is important subject in education.other think that science and technology are more important .discuss both point of veiws and give your opinion.

Some people think that history is important subject in education. other think that science and technology are more important. e5AnB
Some consider that past events is necessary tool in study field while others believe that science and technology are more crucial than that. However I believe that all subjects ought to be chosen according to their pursuing field of study for the future career. On the one side, history enables person to aware more about themselves and past of their country and hometown. Since harking back to, can be more beneficial before deciding some certain choice of decision, as it is been said that history is repeats itself. For example, glimpsing back and looking thoroughly to it some of the people can realise by their mistakes or the deeds of their old generations: great-grandparents or died parents and some particular relatives. As been said above, it about to be certain country`s brilliant and valuable heritage, as it can be defined key to succes by knowing the process of acts of our ancestors. On the other side, in fast rushing and developing world everything and some of the precise spheres are in pace of change and growth. Thus, in these cases it may be a little bit unproper to remind the history, specifically, to the field of science and technology. It will be heavy berden if it is examined by past, as it is new and latest stuff to explore comparably to the past. For instance, being more attentive with some specific devices and gadgets or utilisers of a kitchen or other way can be more convinient and time-saving for most part of the community, as like our daily helper and distance cutter - cars, planes and some latest buses or trains to commit from one place to another. Likewise, knowing science also vital knowledge in current global world; because this is a base of these thechnologies that are undeniably and rapidly developing day by day. In conclusion, although these above factors are considered to be important for both sides, I personally think that everything should be taken into account according to this global world`s process oof act and crutiality.
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events
is necessary tool in study field while others believe that science and technology are more crucial than that.
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However
I believe that all subjects ought to
be chosen
according to their pursuing field of study for the future career.

On the one side, history enables person to aware more about themselves and
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past
of their country and hometown. Since harking back to, can be more beneficial
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before
deciding
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some
certain choice of decision, as it
is been
said that history is repeats itself.

For example
, glimpsing back and looking
thoroughly
to it
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some of the
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people
can
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realise
by their mistakes or the deeds of their
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old
generations: great-grandparents or
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died
parents and
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some
particular relatives. As
been said
above, it about to be certain
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country`s


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brilliant
and valuable heritage, as it can
be defined
key to
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succes
by knowing the process of acts of our ancestors.

On the other side, in
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fast
rushing and developing world everything and
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some of the
precise spheres are in pace of
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change
and growth.
Thus
, in these cases it may be a
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little bit
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unproper
to remind the history,
specifically
, to the field of science and technology.

It will be heavy
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berden
if it
is examined
by
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past
, as it is new and latest stuff to explore
comparably
to the
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past
.
For instance
, being more attentive with
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
specific devices and gadgets or
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utilisers
of a kitchen or other way can be more
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convinient
and time-saving for most part of the community, as like our daily helper and distance cutter
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-
cars,
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planes
and
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some
latest buses or trains
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to commit
from one place to another.
Likewise
, knowing science
also
vital knowledge in
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current
global world;
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because
this is a base of these
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thechnologies
that are
undeniably
and
rapidly
developing day by day.

In conclusion
, although these above factors
are considered
to be
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important
for both sides, I
personally
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think
that everything should
be taken
into account according to this global
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world`s
process
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oof
act and
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crutiality
.

IELTS essay Some people think that history is important subject in education. other think that science and technology are more important.

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