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Some people think that governments should spend money on exploring the outer space. Others think that money could be better spent on solving problems on earth v.1

Some people think that governments should spend money on exploring the outer space. Others think that money could be better spent on solving problems on earth v. 1
It is true that all criminals must be punished. While, some people believe that each criminal should be punished fixedly in their case that they commit, I agree with those who think that at the moment of reaching a verdict, the circumstances of infraction should be taken into consideration. Some people might think that fixed punishment can act as a deterrent to decrease the rate case. That is to say, advocates of such an idea think that, If a person who plans to commit a crime knows what kind of retribution expects him for his deed, he can change his mind. Take a shoplifter for example, who will be afraid of even stealing a small item the price of which is insignificant, thinking about the fact that he will serve sentence of the same period as a bank robber, which could be many years. Moreover, the single type sanction can accelerate the process of jurisdiction in criminal cases. In other words, if the main details are known to the judge, he can reach a verdict immediately, not requiring any additional details of the case. However, while punishing a criminal the circumstances in which the infraction was committed has to be taken into account for some reasons. Firstly, the motive of case can be different and thus it would not be fair, for example, to sentence two different murderers the same period in prison when one of them accidentally killed someone as a self-defence, while the other one is a hardened criminal. Secondly, criminal record of a person who did scandal must be also taken into account and especially for hardened criminals the punishment should be more severe. Finally, depending on the level of the repercussion of the infraction in terms of damage to society, not all same type crimes can be punished equally. During a bank robbery investigation, for instance, it must be clearly identified how much money was stolen, what was the extent of the damage to the bank and its customers and so on. To summarise, although fixed punishment can deter many crimes, details such as reason of case, crime history of an offender and rate of impact of the infraction on society are essential to be considered to reach a fair verdict.
It is true that all
criminals
must
be punished
. While,
some
people
believe that each
criminal
should
be punished
fixedly
in their case that they commit, I
agree
with those
who
think
that at the moment of reaching a verdict, the circumstances of
infraction
should
be taken
into consideration.

Some
people
might
think
that
fixed
punishment can act as a deterrent to decrease the rate case.
That is
to say, advocates of such an
idea
think
that, If a person
who
plans to commit a
crime
knows what kind of retribution
expects
him for his deed, he can
change
his mind. Take a shoplifter
for example
,
who
will be afraid of even stealing a
small
item the price of which is insignificant, thinking about the fact that he will serve sentence of the same period as a bank robber, which could be
many
years.
Moreover
, the single type sanction can accelerate the process of jurisdiction in
criminal
cases.
In other words
, if the main
details
are known
to the judge, he can reach a verdict immediately, not requiring any additional
details
of the case.

However
, while punishing a
criminal
the circumstances in which the
infraction
was committed
has to
be taken
into account for
some
reasons.
Firstly
, the motive of case can be
different
and
thus
it would not be
fair
,
for example
, to sentence two
different
murderers the same period in prison when one of them
accidentally
killed someone as a
self-defence
, while the other one is a hardened
criminal
.
Secondly
,
criminal
record of a person
who
did scandal
must
be
also
taken into account and
especially
for hardened
criminals
the punishment should be more severe.
Finally
, depending on the level of the repercussion of the
infraction
in terms of damage to society, not all same type
crimes
can
be punished
equally
. During a bank robbery investigation,
for instance
, it
must
be
clearly
identified how much money
was stolen
, what was the extent of the damage to the bank and its customers and
so
on.

To
summarise
, although
fixed
punishment can deter
many
crimes
,
details
such as reason of case,
crime
history of an offender and rate of impact of the
infraction
on society are essential to
be considered
to reach a
fair
verdict.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that governments should spend money on exploring the outer space. Others think that money could be better spent on solving problems on earth v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
375 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 7.0
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Grammatical Range: 7.0
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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