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Some people think that governments should give financial support to creative artists such as painters and musicians. Others believe that creative artists should be funded by alternative sources. v.8

Some people think that governments should give financial support to creative artists such as painters and musicians. Others believe that creative artists should be funded by alternative sources. v. 8
It is unquestionable that one very complex issue in today's world is the funding support to creative artists. While there is a controversy that should be supported and funded by the government. I do believe that there is also a case for saying that they should be funded by alternative sources. It is fairly easy to understand the reason why government support is vital to artists and their projects. Perhaps by considering that proportion of artists are living in poverty. In fact, only a few artists, who have achieved success in their fields, are able to support themselves, whereas others are still struggling for life and some of them even living below the poverty line. Likewise, the construction of a non-profitable art gallery, which helps the public to develop a sense of art, requires vast sums of money. Therefore, without financial funding by government, our cities would be much less interesting and attractive. However, we can fairly understand that artists should no emphasis on the state to fund their work. While most musicians and the majority of painters make a living by performing or selling their artistic creations to fans or collectors. Besides, as to painters or musicians, they can expect to gain their income as tutors giving individuals lessons. In short, these artists are capable of gaining financial support in a number of ways. In conclusion, I believe that there are good reasons why artists should not only rely on the government for supporting them, but the alternative sources of financial support should be suggested.
It is unquestionable that one
very
complex issue in
today
's world is the funding
support
to creative
artists
. While there is a controversy that should
be supported
and funded by the
government
. I do believe that there is
also
a case for saying that they should
be funded
by alternative sources.

It is
fairly
easy to understand the reason why
government
support
is vital to
artists
and their projects. Perhaps by considering that proportion of
artists
are living in poverty. In fact,
only
a few
artists
, who have achieved success in their fields, are able to
support
themselves, whereas others are
still
struggling for life and
some
of them even living below the poverty line.
Likewise
, the construction of a non-profitable art gallery, which
helps
the public to develop a sense of art, requires vast sums of money.
Therefore
, without financial funding by
government
, our cities would be much less interesting and attractive.

However
, we can
fairly
understand that
artists
should no emphasis on the state to fund their work. While most musicians and the majority of painters
make
a living by performing or selling their artistic creations to fans or collectors.
Besides
, as to painters or musicians, they can
expect
to gain their income as tutors giving individuals lessons. In short, these
artists
are capable of gaining financial
support
in a number of ways.

In conclusion
, I believe that there are
good
reasons why
artists
should not
only
rely on the
government
for supporting them,
but
the alternative sources of financial
support
should
be suggested
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that governments should give financial support to creative artists such as painters and musicians. Others believe that creative artists should be funded by alternative sources. v. 8

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  American English
4 paragraphs
256 words
6.0
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