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Some people think that government should be held responsible when problem of homelessness snd unemployment arise.Do you agree or disagree

Some people think that government should be held responsible when problem of homelessness snd unemployment arise. YLRqN
Nowadays, a few individuals believe that authorities are totally responsible for the issue of joblessness and homelessness. However, I am convinced with this statement due to valid evidence. To begin with, government is responsible for the problems because they are the one who promises to all people before elections for taking every single responsibility happening in the country. Even, the legislation convinces particular person to trust them and have faith in them as they will overcome with it definitely. For example, a survey was held at Delhi in which it was discussed that every president takes the responsibility of a single problem and try to solve it also. Hence, the government is totally reasonable, why people are facing poverty. Moreover, all the rules are implemented by the authorities. So government should focus on such problems. Even, think about the development of the country as it is handled by the government and they have lots of power in their hand where no-one can question apply it. For instance, an article was published in 'the tribune' in which it was stated that how legislation is responsible for undeveloped countries. As the president was ignoring the big problems and undeveloped areas of the country whereas, focusing on the only prioritization. Thus, the government plays a crucial part in the betterment of the country. However, In some situation people had done something wrong so they are facing problems. For illustration, researchers had researched on why individuals are facing homeless trouble in which it was concluded that near about 1% people had taken a huge amount of loans from several places, which they are not able to return it. Therefore, people are becoming bankrupt and selling all the assets to repay loans. In conclusion, government should focus on poor people and also, help them by giving some parttime jobs. So that a country can be developed properly and raise the economy as well.
Nowadays, a few individuals believe that authorities are
totally
responsible for the issue of joblessness and homelessness.
However
, I
am convinced
with this statement due to valid evidence.

To
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begin
with,
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government
is responsible for the
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problems
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because
they are the one who promises to all
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people
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before
elections for taking every single responsibility happening in the
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country
. Even, the legislation convinces particular person to trust them and have faith in them as they will overcome with it definitely.
For example
, a survey
was held
at Delhi in which it
was discussed
that every president takes the responsibility of a single
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problem
and try to solve it
also
.
Hence
, the
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government
is
totally
reasonable, why
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people
are facing poverty.

Moreover
, all the
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rules
are implemented
by the authorities.
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So
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government
should focus on such
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problems
. Even,
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think
about the development of the
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country
as it
is handled
by the
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government and
they have lots of power in their hand where no-one can question apply it.
For instance
, an article
was published
in 'the tribune' in which it
was stated
that how legislation is responsible for undeveloped
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
. As the president was ignoring the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
big
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problems
and undeveloped areas of the
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country
whereas, focusing on the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
prioritization.
Thus
, the
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government
plays a crucial part in the betterment of the country.

However
, In
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some
situation
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people
had done something
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wrong
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so
they are facing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
problems
. For illustration, researchers had researched on why individuals are facing homeless trouble in which it
was concluded
that near about 1%
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
had taken a huge amount of loans from several places, which they are not able to return it.
Therefore
,
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people
are becoming bankrupt and selling all the assets to repay loans.

In conclusion
,
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government
should focus on poor
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people
and
also
,
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help
them by giving
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some
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parttime
jobs.
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So
that a
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country
can
be developed
properly
and raise the economy
as well
.
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IELTS essay Some people think that government should be held responsible when problem of homelessness snd unemployment arise.

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  American English
5 paragraphs
318 words
6.0
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