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Some people think that getting a degree from university is the best way to gurantee a job, others believe that it would be better to go straight into work and get experience instead. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, gaining a better job is a difficult task. It is commonly believed that tertiary education is the best way to approch ideal job. However, others assume that experience is crucial than getting a degree. I believe that education and work experience are both eqully important. In my opinion, people should complete a university degree before becoming an employee. This essay will discuss the supporting points of view in the forth coming paragraphs, followed by a reasond conclusion. On the one hand, encouraging everyone to enroll in university would also push people towards lucrative professional roles. Some prefessions demand a set of skills that can only be gained by a detailed study of the subject. For example, to become a doctor, an engineer and an architect, and a university degree is essential to gain a broad comprehensive knowledge of the subject to complete these lucrative professional requirenents, which positions also bring a great social prestige. As a consequence, people without a university degree are disadvantaged in finding a well-paid job. Therefore, it is said thata certificate of tertiary education is extremely important to be in professions, where high level skills and through knowledge are the first priority. On the other hand, there are professions, which focus on experience rather than a degree. Entrepreneurship is one of best example in this category. Thus, they think that searching a temporary job after finishing school to develop their work experience instead of wasting time in the academic institutions. For instance, the co-founder of Facebook Mark Zuckerberg started his project when he was attending at school. Moreover, many youngsters naturally excel when working with their hands. Thus, some people are consider that to achieve success students should channel their energy into work rather than university education. In conclusion, some think that obtaining a university degree is the most effective way to gurantee a well-paid job, while others suggest that working experience would better than a the teritary education. In my opinion, if students truly need to ensure a successful career in the future, they should attained a high level of acadwmic achievements.
Nowadays, gaining a better
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job
is a difficult task. It is
commonly
believed that tertiary
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education
is the best way to
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approch
ideal
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job
.
However
, others assume that
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experience
is
Use "(crucial)" to make a comparison with this adjective.
crucial
than getting a
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degree
. I believe that
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education
and work
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experience
are both
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eqully
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important
. In my opinion,
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people
should complete a
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university
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degree
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before
becoming an employee. This essay will discuss the supporting points of view in the forth coming paragraphs, followed by a
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reasond
conclusion.

On the one hand, encouraging everyone to enroll in
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university
would
also
push
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people
towards lucrative professional roles.
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Some
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prefessions
demand a set of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
that can
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only
be gained
by a detailed study of the subject.
For example
, to become a doctor, an engineer and an architect, and a
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university
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degree
is essential to gain a broad comprehensive knowledge of the subject to complete these lucrative professional
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requirenents
, which positions
also
bring a great social prestige. As a consequence,
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people
without a
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university
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degree
are disadvantaged
in finding a well-paid
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job
.
Therefore
, it
is said
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thata
certificate of tertiary
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education
is
extremely
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important
to be in professions, where high level
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skills
and through knowledge are the
first
priority.

On the other hand
, there are professions, which focus on
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experience
rather
than a
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degree
. Entrepreneurship is one
A determiner is probably missing here: "of the best".
of best
example in this category.
Thus
, they
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think
that searching a temporary
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job
after finishing school to develop their work
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experience
instead
of wasting time in the academic institutions.
For instance
, the co-founder of Facebook Mark Zuckerberg
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started
his project when he was attending at school.
Moreover
,
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many
youngsters
naturally
excel when working with their hands.
Thus
,
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some
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people
are
Consider using a past participle here: "considered".
consider
that to achieve success students should channel their energy into work
rather
than
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university
education.

In conclusion
,
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some
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think
that obtaining a
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university
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degree
is the most effective way to
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gurantee
a well-paid
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job
, while others suggest that working
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experience
would better than
Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only "a" or "the" is left.
a the
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teritary
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education
. In my opinion, if students
truly
need to ensure a successful career in the future, they should
The verb 'should' requires the base form of the verb: "attain"
attained
a high level of
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acadwmic
achievements.
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IELTS essay Some people think that getting a degree from university is the best way to gurantee a job, others believe that it would be better to go straight into work and get experience instead.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
348 words
6.0
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