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some people think that exercise is the key to health while others feel that having a balanced diet is more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is undoubtedly sure that staying healthy is at on the top priority of nearly everyone’s list and our daily choices determine just how healthy we are. However, it is a never-ending debate that whether exercise or balanced diet is the main factor to live a healthy life. Personally, I believe on the former view. To commence with, on one side of the argument, many people assert that physical activity has short as well as long term benefits. In other words, regular exercises improve our memory, and helps to live healthy life. In addition to this, it aids to prevent from various types of diseases like diabetes, cardio vascular diseases as well. Furthermore, engaging in daily exercises help to manage weight by burning fat. Besides it, regular physical activities make our body fit as well as helps to enhance quality of our life. For instance: people involving in exercises usually makes us active on one hand whereas, on the other hand, it prevents from diseases related to heart, chances of suffering from ill and so on. Therefore, in general, in order to remain physically as well as mentally active exercise plays a significant role. However, on the other side of the arguments, most of the people argue that food which we intake on a regular basis defines our healthy lifestyles. Balanced diet provides varieties of nutrients which are essential for the overall development of body. Apart from this, lack of nutrients lead to more prone diseases, infections, fatigue, and lower performance. For example: children who do not get enough foods may face growth, and development problems, and frequent infections. So, It is highly regarded that food which contains several amount of nutrient are the result of one’s whole improvement. Although, both factors have equivalent benefits, I reckon that exercises outweigh the balanced diet of being healthy. It is due to the fact that even though, people do diet for losing weight, it is almost impossible or it will take too much time if she/he will not do exercise. Because exercises helps to burn fat in an extreme way In contrast to diet. In conclusion, I would concede that balanced diet is important to health. Despite that, exercise has much merits than it.
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undoubtedly
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is at on the top priority of
nearly
everyone’s list and our daily choices determine
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just
how
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healthy
we are.
However
, it is a never-ending debate that whether
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exercise
or
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balanced
diet is the main factor to
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live
a
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healthy
life.
Personally
, I believe on the former view.

To commence with, on one side of the argument,
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many
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people
assert that physical activity
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has
short as
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well
as long term benefits.
In other words
, regular
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exercises
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improve
our memory, and
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helps
to
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live
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healthy
life.
In addition
to this, it aids to
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prevent
from various types of
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diseases
like diabetes, cardio vascular
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diseases
as
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well
.
Furthermore
, engaging in daily
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exercises
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help
to manage weight by burning
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fat
.
Besides
it, regular physical activities
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make
our body fit as
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well
as
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helps
to enhance quality of our life.
For instance
:
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people
involving in
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exercises
usually
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makes
us active on one hand whereas,
on the other hand
, it
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prevents
from
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diseases
related to heart, chances of suffering from ill and
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so
on.
Therefore
,
in general
, in order to remain
physically
as
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well
as mentally active
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exercise
plays a significant role.

However
, on the other side of the arguments, most of the
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people
argue that food which we intake on a regular basis defines our
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healthy
lifestyles.
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Balanced
diet provides varieties of nutrients which are essential for the
overall
development of body. Apart from this, lack of nutrients lead to more prone
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diseases
, infections, fatigue, and lower performance.
For example
: children who do not
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get
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enough
foods may face growth, and development problems, and frequent infections.
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, It is
highly
regarded that food which contains
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several amount
of nutrient are the result of one’s whole improvement. Although, both factors have equivalent benefits, I reckon that
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exercises
outweigh the
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balanced
diet of being
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healthy
. It is due to the fact that
even though
,
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people
do diet for losing weight, it is almost impossible or it will take too much time if she/he will not do
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exercise
.
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Because
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exercises
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helps
to burn
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fat
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in an extreme way
In contrast
to diet.

In conclusion
, I would concede that
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balanced
diet is
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important
to health. Despite that,
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exercise
has
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much
merits than it.
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IELTS essay some people think that exercise is the key to health while others feel that having a balanced diet is more important.

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  American English
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