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some people think that every individual is responsible for their own healthy life style, others believe that government should take care of it.

some people think that every individual is responsible for their own healthy life style, others believe that government should take care of it. NEGW
Due to many factors such as climate changes, obesity and daily stress the health of people have become worse compare to last century. therefore, some people believe that each person should take care of own healthy life style, while others consider that governments should pay attention this issue. In my opinion also each individual is responsible own health but governments also should facilitate in this issue.
Due to
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factors such as climate
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changes
, obesity and daily
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stress
the health of
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people
have become worse compare to last century.
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therefore
,
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some
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people
believe that each person should take care of
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own
healthy life style, while others consider that
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governments
should pay attention this issue. In my opinion
also
each individual is responsible
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own
health
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but
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governments
also
should facilitate in this issue.

IELTS essay some people think that every individual is responsible for their own healthy life style, others believe that government should take care of it.

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66 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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