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Some people think that education is the only way to overcome challenges we face today Do you agree or disagree with this statement v.2

Some people think that education is the only way to overcome challenges we face today v. 2
In the fast developing world the value of education is increasing day by day that even people have already started to consider it as the only way to tackle with problems of life. The importance of health which is more crucial than education began to be underestimated. I entirely object that education is the only way to solve challenges and this will be illustrated by analyzing the role of both education and health in human' s life. To begin with, education has always been considered to be the bridge for young people to real life. And it is not denying that an educated person solves each problem carefully and independently. Therefore, a person who is knowledgeable enough can contribute to the development of his own motherland like building fascinating study centres, schools or even publishing books which are pivotal for people. On the other hand, there are some other important factors that need to be considered which are more valuable than education. One of them can be health as it is also a cue to success. These days people with the idea of becoming educated they do not focus on their health. However, we ought to keep in mind that a person becoming a burden to his family and friends cannot earn an income while a healthy person who tries to be educated can bring a lot benefits not only to his family but also to his own motherland. By way of conclusion, I should recopulate one thing is that I entirely disagree with people who reckon education as the only tool to deal with the problems we encounter in our daily life.
In the
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fast
developing world the value of
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education
is increasing day by day that even
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people
have already
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started
to consider it as the
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only
way to tackle with problems of life. The importance of
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health
which is more crucial than
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education
began to
be underestimated
. I
entirely
object that
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education
is the
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only
way to solve challenges and this will
be illustrated
by analyzing the role of both
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education
and
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health
in
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human&
#039; s life.

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begin
with,
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education
has always
been considered
to be the bridge for young
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people
to real life. And it
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is not denying
that an educated
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person
solves each problem
carefully
and
independently
.
Therefore
, a
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person
who is knowledgeable
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enough
can contribute to the development of his
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own
motherland like building fascinating study
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centres
, schools or even publishing books which are pivotal for
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people
.

On the other hand
, there are
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some
other
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important
factors that need to
be considered
which are more valuable than
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education
. One of them can be
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health
as it is
also
a cue to success. These days
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people
with the
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idea
of becoming educated they do not focus on their
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health
.
However
, we ought to
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keep
in mind that a
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person
becoming a burden to his family and friends cannot earn an income while a healthy
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person
who tries to
be educated
can bring
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a lot benefits
not
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only
to his family
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but
also
to his
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own
motherland.

By way of conclusion, I should
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recopulate
one thing is that I
entirely
disagree with
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people
who reckon
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education
as the
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only
tool to deal with the problems we encounter in our daily life.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that education is the only way to overcome challenges we face today v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
273 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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