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Some people think that ecomic progress is important for any country's success while others believevthat other factors are important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people think that ecomic progress is important for any country's success while others believevthat other factors are important. ABDBe
People have different views about the elements which are necessary for any nation's development. Although economic prosperity is essential for the progression of any country, I also believe that other aspects are equally important. On the one hand, there are certain reasons due to people think that economic advancement measure the success of country. First and the foremost, rich economy means job creation. In other words, as rich nations can invest money on industries thus they need of more emloyees for the production of things as a result more people can get jobs which is beneficial to make the living standard higher of natives. Moreover, government receive lot of money. To be specific, if individuals are able to earn high saleries then they have more needs hence they spend more money on commodities and pay indirect taxes to higher authorities therefore adminstration can allots this money for the development of other sectors On the other hand, i would argue that other factores also play a vital role in the success of country. Initially, people can enjoy their life if they have their rights and freedom. To make it more clear, individuals can enjoy the real sense of liberty if they have their rights such as, to critise the political leaders if they behave badly, explore the wrold according to their interest and so on. For example, police officers exploit the people for their own purpose just because of their authority thus people face problems. Finally, good health and education is also very important. To explain it, undoubtedly human beings can leading a better life if they are healty and get their goals not only this but good education services are also lay the foundation of prosper society because educated generation can make more efforts and can done more researches which are important for the success of any nation. In conclusion, eventhough economic advancement make sure the prosperty of any country however other freedom, good education and health services can not be ignored to calculate the success of nation.
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country
, I
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believe that
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other
aspects are
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important
.

On the one hand, there are certain reasons due to
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people
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think
that economic advancement measure the
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success
of
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country
.
First
and the foremost, rich economy means job creation. In
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other
words, as rich nations can invest
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money
on industries
thus
they need of more
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emloyees
for the production of things
as a result
more
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people
can
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get
jobs which is beneficial to
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make
the living standard higher of natives.
Moreover
,
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government
receive
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lot of
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money
. To be specific, if individuals are able to earn high
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saleries
then they have more needs
hence
they spend more
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money
on commodities and pay indirect taxes to higher authorities
therefore
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adminstration
can
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allots
this
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money
for the development of
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other
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sectors


On the
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i
would argue that
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factores
also
play a vital role in the
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success
of
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country
.
Initially
,
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people
can enjoy their life if they have their rights and freedom. To
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make
it more
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clear
, individuals can enjoy the real sense of liberty if they have their rights such as, to
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critise
the political leaders if they behave
badly
, explore the
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wrold
according to their interest and
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so
on.
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, police officers exploit the
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people
for their
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own
purpose
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just
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because
of their authority
thus
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people
face problems.
Finally
,
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good
health and education is
also
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important
. To
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undoubtedly
human beings can leading a better life if they are
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healty
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get
their goals not
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this
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good
education services are
also
lay the foundation of prosper society
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because
educated generation can
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make
more efforts and can
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done
more researches which are
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important
for the
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success
of any nation.

In conclusion
,
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eventhough
economic advancement
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make
sure the
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prosperty
of any
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country
however
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other
freedom,
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good
education and health services can not be
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ignored
to calculate the
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success
of nation.
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IELTS essay Some people think that ecomic progress is important for any country's success while others believevthat other factors are important.

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