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Some people think that city governments should spend more money to promote bicycle use in cities. Others, however, believe that cities should focus on investing in public transportation systems like trains or buses. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people think that city governments should spend more money to promote bicycle use in cities. Others, however, believe that cities should focus on investing in public transportation systems like trains or buses. 8a5ar
While some people think that the local administration should increase funding to encourage bicycle use among citizens, others opine that more emphasis ought to be given to strengthening the public transport networks. In my opinion, the authorities should take both measures to improve the traffic situation in cities. On the one hand, some people believe that the state should spend money to motivate bicycle use as it is healthy and environment friendly. When people are encouraged to use bicycles as the primary mode of transport pollution and consumption of fossil fuels will come down. To illustrate this, as the majority of people are using bicycles in Melbourne, the amount of particulate matter in air is very low according to a recent survey by the state. Furthermore, it is observed that when more people start using the bicycle the society becomes healthier. As cycling is a good physical activity, people who regularly use bicycle to commute stay healthy and this will motivate others to adopt this practice. On the other hand, others contend that improving public transport networks through enhanced funding by the state will save time and reduce traffic congestion in cities. An efficient and affordable transport system is considered a boon to office goers and ordinary people as it saves much time which is very vital in their busy work schedule. So it is the responsibility of the state to allocate more funds for building an efficient public transport system. A clear example of this is the metro train service in Chennai which has efficiently reduced the travel time by half for people travelling on it. Moreover, the provision of a good transport system in the cities helps to control the traffic congestion which is considered to be a mounting issue in most cities due to urbanisation and population outburst. To sum up, after analysing the situation, it is not hard to see that both approaches have their merits. In my opinion, the government should encourage cycling and at the same time it should invest more in public transport systems.
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that the local administration should increase funding to encourage
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among citizens, others opine that more emphasis ought to be
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networks. In my opinion, the authorities should take both measures to
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the traffic situation in cities.

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believe that the
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should spend money to motivate
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bicycle
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as it is healthy and environment friendly. When
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people
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use
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bicycles
as the primary mode of
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pollution and consumption of fossil fuels will
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come
down. To illustrate this, as the majority of
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are using
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bicycles
in Melbourne, the amount of particulate matter in air is
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low according to a recent survey by the
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.
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the society becomes healthier. As cycling is a
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physical activity,
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use
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bicycle
to commute stay healthy and this will motivate others to adopt this practice.

On the
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hand, others contend that improving
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public
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transport
networks through enhanced funding by the
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state
will save
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time
and
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reduce
traffic congestion in cities. An efficient and affordable
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transport
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is considered
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people
as it saves much
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time
which is
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very
vital in their busy work schedule.
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it is the responsibility of the
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to allocate more funds for building an efficient
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public
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transport
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. A
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example of this is the metro train service in Chennai which has
efficiently
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the travel
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by half for
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in the cities
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helps
to control the traffic congestion which
is considered
to be a mounting issue in most cities due to
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urbanisation
and population outburst.

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the situation, it is not
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to
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that both approaches have their merits. In my opinion, the
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government
should encourage cycling and at the same
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time
it should invest more in
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public
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transport
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systems
.
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IELTS essay Some people think that city governments should spend more money to promote bicycle use in cities. Others, however, believe that cities should focus on investing in public transportation systems like trains or buses.

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