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Some people think that children should go to school at the age of 6, others do not think so.

Some people think that children should go to school at the age of 6, others do not think so. ApBAL
Nowadays, people have different views about whether children ought to go to school at the age of 6 or not. This essay will discuss the positive sides of going to school at an early age as well as negative aspects of starting to study at this age. On the one hand, the younger the person, the better his brain can absorb information and memorize it, and for this reason parents send their children to school at an early age. They also can let them go to school at this age in order to develop their ability of communicating with other people, teachers and other pupils in this case. For example, if a child has bad behaviour and can not talk properly, play with other children, after attending school this child will learn to behave correctly. Moreover, at this age most children are hyperactive and their parents think that it can be beneficial to direct their energy for education instead of playing games. On the other hand, by sending children to school at the age of 6, parents somewhat steal their childhood. More importantly, their brains will be overloaded with a lot of different information already at an early age. For instance, because while other children play games, the child must do hometask. Furthermore, they must learn all subjects and remember different kinds of information that teachers give them at school, and this will lead to health problems and tiredness at an early age. In conclusion, although the age of 6 is the traditional age for going to school, it is not a necessity for parents to send their children to study at this age.
Nowadays,
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of 6 or not. This essay will discuss the
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positive
sides of going to
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early
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as well
as
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aspects of starting to study at this age.

On the one hand, the younger the person, the better his brain can absorb information and memorize it, and
for this reason
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parents
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send
their
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children
to
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. They
also
can
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at this
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in order to develop their ability of communicating with
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, teachers and
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pupils
in this case
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behaviour
and can not talk
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, play with
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, after attending
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this child will learn to behave
correctly
.
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age
most
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children
are hyperactive and their
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parents
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that it can be beneficial to direct their energy for education
instead
of playing games.

On the
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hand, by sending
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to
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school
at the
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age
of 6,
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somewhat steal their childhood. More
importantly
, their brains will
be overloaded
with
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a lot of
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different
information already at an
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early
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.
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play games, the child
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do
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, they
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learn all subjects and remember
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different
kinds of information that teachers give them at
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school
, and this will lead to health problems and tiredness at an
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early
age.

In conclusion
, although the
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of 6 is the traditional
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for going to
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school
, it is not a necessity for
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parents
to
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their
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children
to study at this
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age
.
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IELTS essay Some people think that children should go to school at the age of 6, others do not think so.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
274 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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