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Multinational companies during globalization

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Multinational companies nowadays find it convenient both to market their goods all over the world and setup production facilities wherever they find cheap manpower and raw material. In my opinion this has had an adverse effect on our quality of life in three main areas. The first area is their products. Supporters of globalization would argue that multinational companies make high- quality goods available to more people. While this may be true to some extent, it also means that we have less choice of products to consume. When powerful multinational companies invade local markets with their goods, they often are obliged local companies with fewer resources to go out of business. In consequence, we are obliged to buy multinational products whether we like them or not This brings me to my second point. It is sometimes said that multinational companies and globalization are making societies more open. This may be true. However, I would point out that as a result the human race is losing its cultural diversity. If we consumed varied products, societies wherever we live would be more varied. This can be seen by the fact that we all shop in identical multinational supermarkets and buy identical products wherever we live Thirdly, defenders of multinational companies often point out that they provide jobs. Although this is undoubtedly true, it also means that we have become more vulnerable on them, which in turn makes us more vulnerable to their decisions. When, for example, a multinational decides to move its production facilities to another country, this has an adverse effect on its workers who lose their jobs All in all, I believe that if we as voters pressured our governments to make multinational companies more responsible and to protect local producers from outside competition, we could have the benefits of globalization without its disadvantages
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nowadays find it convenient both to market their
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all over the world and setup production facilities wherever they find
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manpower and raw material. In my opinion this has had an adverse effect on our quality of life in three main areas.

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first
area is their
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products
. Supporters of globalization would argue that
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high- quality
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extent, it
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to consume. When powerful
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invade local markets with their
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This brings me to my second point. It is
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said that
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and globalization are making societies more open. This may be true.
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, I would point out that
as a result
the human race is losing its cultural diversity. If we consumed varied
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products
, societies wherever we
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live
would be more varied. This can be
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seen
by the fact that we all shop in identical
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supermarkets and
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Thirdly
, defenders of
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point out that they provide jobs. Although this is
undoubtedly
true, it
also
means that we have become more vulnerable on them, which in turn
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us more vulnerable to their decisions. When,
for example
, a
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decides to
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its production facilities to another country, this has an adverse effect on its workers who lose their jobs

All in all, I believe that if we as voters pressured our
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governments
to
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more responsible and to protect local producers from outside competition, we could have the benefits of globalization without its disadvantages
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IELTS essay Multinational companies during globalization

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  American English
5 paragraphs
299 words
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