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Write about the following topic. Some people think that art is an essential subject for children at school while others think it is a waste of time. Discuss both views and give your opinion Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

Some people think that art is an essential subject for children at school while others think it is a waste of time. Discuss both views and give your opinion Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience RAKM
The art plays a prime role in the upbringing of children from young age. It provides an engaging information about the culture, people and also improve creative skills. Art is what keeps humanity alive and it is an source of enterrtainment in offering solace to oneself in today's busy world. Art includes differnet aspects such as painting, singing, poetry and acting. Making children learn these forms of art enchances the creative side of brain. Which may also help them in there academic subjects to think from a differnet perspective. Children can improve social skills such as teamwork, how to behave in a group, learn social ettiquites, leadership qualities all these make children a complete human being when they grow up to become an adult. Although their is a lot of use on learning arts. Some people think it as waste of time. In today's world as it is changing very swiftly it is important to engage children from an young age on subjects, such as science and mathematics so they can become competent enough to fit into the world of technology and also help themselves secure a safe job. Another group of people argue that children who are interested and want to pursue art as there career option should only be taught, it leaves room for children who are not interested. So they can master there own field excluding arts. In my opinion, art is as important as science, sports and other academic subjects together groom children into a complete human being. Core skills such as leadership qualities, culture, language, social behaviour, general ettiquites can be imbibed into children only by studying art as these are the major skills needed to excel in world, though we are good at what we do.
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plays a prime role in the upbringing of
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children
from young age. It provides
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an engaging information
about the culture,
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people
and
also
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improve
creative
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skills
.
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Art
is what
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keeps
humanity alive and it is
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an
source of
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enterrtainment
in offering solace to oneself in
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today
's busy world.

Art includes
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differnet
aspects such as painting, singing, poetry and acting. Making
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children
learn these forms of
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art
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enchances
the creative side of brain.
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them in
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there
academic subjects to
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think
from a
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differnet
perspective.
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Children
can
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improve
social
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skills
such as teamwork, how to behave in a group, learn social
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ettiquites
, leadership qualities all these
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make
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children
a complete human being when they grow up to become an adult.

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is
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a lot of
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use
on learning
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arts
.
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Some
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people
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think
it as waste of time. In
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today
's world as it is changing
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very
swiftly
it is
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important
to engage
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children
from
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an
young age on subjects, such as science and mathematics
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so
they can become competent
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enough
to fit into the world of technology and
also
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help
themselves secure a safe job. Another group of
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people
argue that
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children
who
are interested
and want to pursue
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art
as there career option should
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only
be taught
, it
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leaves
room for
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children
who are not interested.
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they can master there
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own
field excluding arts.

In my opinion,
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art
is as
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important
as science, sports and other academic subjects together groom
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children
into a complete human being. Core
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skills
such as leadership qualities, culture, language, social
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behaviour
, general
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ettiquites
can
be imbibed
into
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children
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only
by studying
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art
as these are the major
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skills
needed to excel in world, though we are
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good
at what we do.

IELTS essay Some people think that art is an essential subject for children at school while others think it is a waste of time. Discuss both views and give your opinion Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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292 words
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