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Some people think that already government can make significant changes in society while others individual can a lot of influence so discuss both views and your opinion.

In today's modern world, government should provide the lots of facilities for nation's citizens. A few proponents believe that government can make important changes in society whereas others people can a lots of influence. In this essay, I will shad some lights on both aspects and giving my opinions after analysing both of arguments. There is society of through who concede that in these days, government make the new policies and reform it can change society such as provide free education and mid-day meal program. To explain it, if authority provide the free education to every child then children will well educated and after study they will join the jobs so they can reduce the poverty level as they will improve the stand of living that is why government develop the society status. Besides this, nowadays, authority maintain the international relationship with different nations therefore, government can improve the economy level as authority can work as a bridge. Therefore, students can go to all nations for study purpose and complete the all goals. On the other hand, I support individual who are lagger hands, believe that in these days, people help the authority such as they follow the all rules which are made by government because it is essential for every one like traffic rules and growing plants. Besides this, if people follow the traffic rules then they can reduce the pollution and accident. In addition, some people pay the income tax and government collect the income tax money because it is necessary for everyone and they spend tax money on the country development such as make a new road, make a good transport system. To conclude, after mulling over bath the aspects, I would like to say that government should maintain the country system and they give the good oppertunities everyone's in a equal way.
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today
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should provide the lots of facilities for nation's citizens. A few proponents believe that
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government
can
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make
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important
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changes
in
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society
whereas others
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people
can
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a lots
of influence. In this essay, I
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will shad
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lights on both aspects and giving my opinions after
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analysing
both of arguments. There is
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society
of through who concede that in these days,
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government
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make
the new policies and reform it can
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change
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society
such as provide free education and mid-day meal program. To
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explain
it, if
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authority
provide the free education to every child then children will
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well educated
and after study they will
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join
the jobs
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so
they can
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reduce
the poverty level as they will
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improve
the stand of living
that is
why
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government
develop the
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society
status.
Besides
this, nowadays,
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authority
maintain the international relationship with
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different
nations
therefore
,
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government
can
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improve
the economy level as
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authority
can work as a bridge.
Therefore
, students can go to all nations for study purpose and complete the all goals.
On the other hand
, I support individual who are
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lagger
hands, believe that in these days,
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people
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help
the
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authority
such as they follow the all
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rules
which
are made
by
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government
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because
it is essential for every one like traffic
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rules
and growing plants.
Besides
this, if
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people
follow the traffic
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rules
then they can
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reduce
the pollution and accident.
In addition
,
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some
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people
pay the income tax and
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government
collect the income tax money
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because
it is necessary for
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everyone and
they spend tax money on the country development such as
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make
a new road,
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make
a
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good
transport system.
To conclude
, after mulling over bath the aspects, I would like to say that
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government
should maintain the country
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system and
they give the
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good
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oppertunities
everyone's in
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a
equal way.
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IELTS essay Some people think that already government can make significant changes in society while others individual can a lot of influence so

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
306 words
5.5
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