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Some people think that government ensure the healthy life style of people , but others argue that it should be decided by individuals. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It is often argued that the State should take the responsibility of ensuring a healthy lifestyle of its citizens. However, others believe that the ones lie on the person to lead a healthy, stress-free life. I believe that it is the joint responsibility of the individual and the government and over the course of my essay, I will explain my point of view. On the other hand, it is true that each person is responsible for his own life choices. A healthy body is a healthy mind. So it is our duty to eat healthily and lead an active life. Nobody will be able to change our lifestyle for the better if we ourselves are unwilling to adopt a healthy way of living. What one eats, how much one exercise, who one does to lead a healthy stress-free life is one's own concern. To illustrate, most textbooks teach us about balanced healthy diet in our science class. However, with time, most of this knowledge is put on the back burner when we indulge in eating fast food. Similarly, the statutory warnings like "Smoking kills", "Alcohol is injurious to health" are flashed during the screening of any such scene on television. However, that does not deter people from taking up these vices! Therefore, it is up to the individual to make healthy lifestyle choices to ensure longevity and well being. Having said this, it is also true that the government, being an administrative body, should take the responsibility of maintaining the well-being of the public for various reasons. Firstly, improving the health of the citizens eventually leads to a decrease in disease burden and healthcare-related expenditure. This money can be utilised by the State for other beneficial purposes like building infrastructure. For example, the NHS of the United Kingdom takes care of the country's health, and it would be advantageous if a part of the expenditure could be cut down thanks to a healthier society. Secondly, the government alone has the authority to take the fast food chains heavily and to curb the sale of liquor and tobacco. This will ensure decreased availability to the people and therefore improve the health of the public. Moreover, government-sponsored health awareness programmes can help to build a healthy future generation.
It is
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argued that the State should take the responsibility of ensuring a
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healthy
lifestyle of its citizens.
However
, others believe that the ones lie on the person to
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lead
a
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healthy
,
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stress
-free
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life
. I believe that it is the joint responsibility of the individual and the
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government
and over the course of my essay, I will
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explain
my point of view.

On the other hand
, it is true that each person is responsible for his
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own
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life
choices. A
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healthy
body is a
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healthy
mind.
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So
it is our duty to eat
healthily
and
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lead
an active
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life
. Nobody will be able to
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change
our lifestyle for the better if we ourselves are unwilling to adopt a
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healthy
way of living. What one eats, how much one exercise,
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who one
does to
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lead
a
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healthy
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stress
-free
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life
is one's
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own
concern. To illustrate, most textbooks teach us about balanced
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healthy
diet in our science
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class
.
However
, with time, most of this knowledge
is put
on the back burner when we indulge in eating
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fast
food.
Similarly
, the statutory warnings like
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"
Smoking kills
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"
,
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"
Alcohol is injurious to health
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"
are flashed
during the screening of any such scene on television.
However
, that does not deter
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people
from taking up these vices!
Therefore
, it is up to the individual to
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make
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healthy
lifestyle choices to ensure longevity and
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well being
.

Having said this, it is
also
true that the
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government
, being an administrative body, should take the responsibility of maintaining the well-being of the public for various reasons.
Firstly
, improving the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
health
of the citizens
eventually
leads to a decrease in disease burden and healthcare-related expenditure. This money can be
Possible spelling mistake. ‘utilised’ is British English.
utilised
by the State for other beneficial purposes like building infrastructure.
For example
, the NHS of the United Kingdom takes care of the country's
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
health
, and it would be advantageous if a part of the expenditure could be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cut
down thanks to a healthier society.
Secondly
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
alone has the authority to take the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
fast
food chains
heavily
and to curb the sale of liquor and tobacco. This will ensure decreased availability to the
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people
and
therefore
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improve
the
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health
of the public.
Moreover
,
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government
-sponsored
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health
awareness
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programmes
can
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help
to build a
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healthy
future generation.
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IELTS essay Some people think that government ensure the healthy life style of people, but others argue that it should be decided by individuals.

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
376 words
5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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