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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. oAMb
Nowadays university students have a variety of choices with regard to study courses. Some individuals argue that university students should have freedom to choose whatever study subject they desire whereas, other people are deeply opposed to that idea and are of the opinion that university students should study courses that are guaranteed to be useful in the future such as science and technology. This essay will discuss both sides of the argument in detail and provide evidence as to why studying a desired subject is superior. The decision to to choose a course of study based on one’s personal interest is far much better than choosing to study a subject based on perceived future benefits. A university student is more likely to excel in a study subject he is genuinely interested in because he will dedicate more time studying and doing research as he finds it very enjoyable. As a result the student invests more time and energy to that subject. A study carried out recently at the Washington State University revealed that over 82% of university students who chose a study subject in an area of great interest graduate with outstanding grades. In addition to better school performance, university students who choose to study preferred subjects generally experience better job satisfaction in the future. This is in contrast to their counterparts who chose to study subjects not due to any personal interest but because they thought those subject would be useful in the future. For example, a cross-section study done during a 3 - year period among medical practitioners in southeast Asia revealed that among the population of medical doctors persuaded by family members to study medicine only 25% of them reported having job satisfaction. In conclusion, I strongly agree with the argument that university students, should be allowed to study subjects of their choice as this often results in excellent school performance and overall job satisfaction.
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courses.
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individuals argue that
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university
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students
should have freedom to choose whatever
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study
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subject
they desire whereas, other
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are
deeply
opposed to that
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idea
and are of the opinion that
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university
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students
should
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study
courses that
are guaranteed
to be useful in the
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future
such as science and technology. This essay will discuss both sides of the argument in detail and provide evidence as to why studying a desired
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subject
is superior.

The decision
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choose a course of
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study
based on one’s personal interest is far much better than choosing to
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study
a
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subject
based on perceived
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future
benefits. A
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university
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student
is more likely to excel in a
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study
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subject
he is
genuinely
interested in
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because
he will dedicate more time studying and doing research as he finds it
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very
enjoyable.
As a result
the
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student
invests more time and energy to that
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subject
. A
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carried out recently at the Washington State
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University
revealed that over 82% of
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university
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students
who chose a
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study
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subject
in an area of great interest graduate with outstanding grades.

In addition
to better school performance,
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university
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students
who choose to
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study
preferred
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subjects
generally
experience better job satisfaction in the
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future
. This is
in contrast
to their counterparts who chose to
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study
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subjects
not due to any personal interest
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but
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because
they
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those
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would be useful in the
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.
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, a cross-section
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study
done during a 3
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year period among medical practitioners in
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southeast Asia
revealed that among the population of medical doctors persuaded by family members to
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medicine
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only
25% of them reported having job satisfaction.

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strongly
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agree
with the argument that
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, should be
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allowed
to
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study
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subjects
of their choice as this
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often
results in excellent school performance and
overall
job satisfaction.
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IELTS essay Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
318 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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