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Some people think that a sense of compititon in children should be encouraged .other believe that children's who are thought co opration become more useful adults .discuss both view give your opinion.

Some people think that a sense of compititon in children should be encouraged. other believe that children's who are thought co opration become more useful adults. QMYEy
Although it is sometime thought that compititiveness is good for offsprings, while other people consider that team work is best way to improve children's talents. this essay will put forth all considerable aspects related above mentioned notion along with my personal perspective in upcoming paragraph. To commence with benifits of contesting between children. first and foremost pros is that yougsters learn about hard work. To explain, there are more toddlers who do not do hard work because they do not have any reason for working hard school shoud create rivalries between youngsters, than they will do hard work for winning and get name and fame. another benifit off compititon is that they came become independent. in other words, if they do their task by themselves rather than relying on others than they can handle their any sort of difficult cercumstances without taking other's helps. Nevertheless, there are various reason why people support to coordination habits. first reason is that they can learn and teach each other and become expert in every field. briefly, if children do their work in team, they will learn other skills and teach to other as a good services. By the team work chances of getting success is increased because it is common saying that when you work together, you are stronger. Secondly, they learn about charity and can serve to their country by doing team work. for instance, recently servey indian government orgnised a law related cleaning. which has been possible due to cooperation. In conclusion, i opine that cooperation behaviour is good because they can learn and teach as service to their nation by team work.
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compititiveness
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for
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people
consider that
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team
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work
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is best
way to
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improve
children's talents.
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this
essay will put forth all considerable aspects related above mentioned notion along with my personal perspective in upcoming paragraph. To commence with
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benifits
of contesting between children.
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first
and foremost pros is that
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yougsters
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learn
about
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hard
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work
. To
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explain
, there are more toddlers who do not do
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hard
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work
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because
they do not have any reason for working
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hard
school
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shoud
create rivalries between youngsters, than they will do
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hard
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work
for winning and
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get
name and fame.
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another
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benifit
off
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compititon
is that they came become independent.
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in
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other
words, if they do their task by themselves
rather
than relying on others than they can handle their any sort of difficult
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cercumstances
without taking other's
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helps
.
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, there are various reason why
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people
support to coordination habits.
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first
reason is that they can
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learn
and teach each
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other
and become expert in every field.
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briefly
, if children do their
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work
in
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team
, they will
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learn
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other
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skills
and teach to
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other
as a
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good
services. By the
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team
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work
chances of getting success
is increased
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because
it is common saying that when you
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work
together, you are stronger.
Secondly
, they
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learn
about charity and can serve to their country by doing
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team
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work
.
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for
instance, recently
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servey
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indian
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government
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orgnised
a law related cleaning.
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which
has been possible due to cooperation.
In conclusion
,
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i
opine that cooperation
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behaviour
is
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good
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because
they can
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learn
and teach as service to their nation by
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team
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work
.
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IELTS essay Some people think that a sense of compititon in children should be encouraged. other believe that children's who are thought co opration become more useful adults.

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