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Some people think studying from the past offers no benefits to today’s life, while others believe history is a valuable source of information for us.

Some people think studying from the past offers no benefits to today’s life, while others believe history is a valuable source of information for us. Lq1bK
It is claimed by a segment of society, learning history give no benefit to current era. Whereas critics argue that history is advantageous for knowledge to individual. Although, both the prospective hold their own significance, yet, I recon with latter notion as medical research always based on past time. To begin with, there are multifarious reasons why study of past is not beneficial for modern time. First and foremost, due to technical advancement, history not in use. To justify, space research and other type of technology development does not depend on history. Moreover, some type of job do not require history. To clarify, acounting, retail, engineering jobs do not need to study of history. For instance, according an article published in the leading newspaper in 2012, it stated that 70% jobs had not required knowledge of history. Thus, it is clear that history as subject not necessary in curriculum. On the other hand, I think that history is valueable source of information. Primarily, people can connect their culture and traditional through study of history. To elucidate, if new generation learn history, they can understand the value of customs and rituals, Consequently it pass to next generation. In addition to this, in the field of medical industry, history play a vital role. To elaborate, experts always follow the old method to treatment of patients and they use Medicine which are discovered by scientists. To exemplify, currently all world survive with a pandemic disease, in this time expert has tried to solve with plazma method. Hence it is evident that study of history can be benefited for people. To recapitulate from above discourse, it can be construed that despite both the approach take their own place but i concur that studying of history is necessarily as it connect with culture and tradition and transfer it one generation to other generation.
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is claimed
by a segment of society, learning
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history
give no benefit to
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current
era. Whereas critics argue that
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history
is advantageous for knowledge to individual. Although, both the prospective hold their
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own
significance,
yet
,
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I recon
with latter notion as medical research always based on
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past time
. To
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begin
with, there are multifarious reasons why
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study
of past is not beneficial for modern time.
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and foremost, due to technical advancement,
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history
not in
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use
. To justify, space research and other type of technology development does not depend on
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history
.
Moreover
,
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some
type of job do not require
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history
. To clarify,
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acounting
, retail, engineering jobs do not need to
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study
of
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history
.
For instance
, according an article published in the leading newspaper in 2012, it stated that 70% jobs had not required knowledge of
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history
.
Thus
, it is
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clear
that
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history
as subject not necessary in curriculum.
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, I
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think
that
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history
is
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valueable
source of information.
Primarily
,
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people
can connect their culture and traditional through
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study
of
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history
. To elucidate, if new generation learn
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history
, they can understand the value of customs and rituals,
Consequently
it
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pass
to
next
generation.
In addition
to this, in the field of medical industry,
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history
play a vital role. To elaborate, experts always follow the
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old
method to treatment of
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patients and
they
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use
Medicine which
are discovered
by scientists. To exemplify,
currently
all world survive with a pandemic disease, in this time expert has tried to solve with
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plazma
method.
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Hence
it is evident that
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study
of
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history
can
be benefited
for
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people
. To recapitulate from above discourse, it can
be construed
that despite both the approach take their
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own
place
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but
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i
concur that studying of
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history
is
necessarily
as it connect with culture and tradition and transfer it one generation to other generation.
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IELTS essay Some people think studying from the past offers no benefits to today’s life, while others believe history is a valuable source of information for us.

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