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Some people think students should study the science of food and how to prepare it. Others think students should spend time on important subjects.

Some people think students should study the science of food and how to prepare it. Others think students should spend time on important subjects. mkO8
A portion of people believes that science of food is a useful skill to teach children in the school curriculum while others think the school should not encourage such skills instead school timings should be utilized for main subjects. I certainly believe a subject should be considered for the science of food for the students to learn a special ability to survive in any situation. This essay will outline the pros and cons to prove the argument. Firstly, adding a subject or activity about the science of food in schools schedule may encourage people interested in this field and also others can learn to build their skill as food is the main resource to survive. For instance, an old man in USA after his wife death who is living alone for the rest of his life has started cooking with basic knowledge which was thought in high school for survival and created a revolution in the food industry by introducing a new way in fried chicken know as KFC. However, food is an important source to live every individual should build minimum cooking skills. In contrast, parents and mentors feel adding a subject about food to curriculum would be burden for students and also it a waste of time in school period, many students would not be interested in learning the science of food which leads to a time waste entertainment in class durations. To recapitulate, I firmly advocate though disadvantages outweigh the advantages learning about food is always an added knowledge or skill for an individual.
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to teach children in the
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curriculum while others
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school
should not encourage such
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skills
instead
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timings should
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subjects
. I
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should
be considered
for the
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for the students to learn a special ability to survive in any situation. This essay will outline the pros and cons to prove the argument.

Firstly
, adding a
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subject
or activity about the
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science
of
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food
in
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schools
schedule may encourage
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people
interested in this field and
also
others can learn to build their
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skill
as
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food
is the main resource to survive.
For instance
, an
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old
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man
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after his wife death who is living alone for the rest of his life has
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started
cooking with basic knowledge which was
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thought
in high
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school
for survival and created a revolution in the
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food
industry by introducing a new way in fried chicken know as KFC.
However
,
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food
is an
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important
source to
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live
every individual should build minimum cooking
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skills
.

In contrast
, parents and mentors feel adding a
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subject
about
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food
to curriculum would be burden for students and
also
it a waste of time in
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school
period,
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many
students would not
be interested
in learning the
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science
of
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food
which leads to a time waste entertainment in
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class
durations.

To recapitulate, I
firmly
advocate though disadvantages outweigh the advantages learning about
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food
is always an
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added
knowledge or
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skill
for an individual.
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IELTS essay Some people think students should study the science of food and how to prepare it. Others think students should spend time on important subjects.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
257 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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