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When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep them alive.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep them alive. with this opinion? YrY5
Nowadays, technological advances and their rapid and wide applications are having a significant impact on a nation’s traditional skills and ways of life. Some argue that such impact is so extraordinary that it would make conventional skills and life styles obsolete. However, I believe they would continue to thrive by providing alternatives to modern ways of life, and innovative ideas for modern technologies. First of all, traditional skills and ways of life are becoming an alternative solution to the problems caused by “mainstreamed” ways of life which are greatly influenced by modern technologies. For instance, a cozy restaurant where traditional, home-brewed beer is served, offers another experience to people who are bored with branded beers that have the same flavor and come out of mass production with new technologies. It is in such a venue where traditional skills are preserved, people become relaxed and educated. Providing diversity and thus enriching modern ways of life, such traditional skills and ways of life would continue to have their place. Furthermore, conventional skills provide innovative ideas to the development of modern technologies. For example, sparkled by how the word “Love” is traditionally knitted into a sweater by some ethnic minority women in some parts of Asia, some business managers from textile industry have developed some production lines by applying the traditional skills to Computer-Aided Designs (CAD). The products have boosted the companies’ sales which in turn have increased their investment in preserving traditional skills for further developing their technologies. To conclude, traditional skills and life styles are increasingly becoming a useful alternative to the homogeneity brought by global applications of modern technologies. However, the evolution of technologies is a selection process, whereby some would become obsolete, but there is no doubt that some would thrive when their roles are appreciated.
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extraordinary that it would
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styles obsolete.
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traditional
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skills
and
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ways
of
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life
are becoming an alternative solution to the problems caused by “mainstreamed”
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ways
of
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life
which are
greatly
influenced by
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modern
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technologies
.
For instance
, a cozy restaurant where
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traditional
, home-brewed beer
is served
, offers another experience to
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people
who
are bored
with branded beers that have the same flavor and
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come
out of mass production with new
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technologies
. It is in such a venue where
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traditional
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skills
are preserved
,
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people
become relaxed and educated. Providing diversity and
thus
enriching
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modern
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ways
of
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life
, such
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traditional
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skills
and
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ways
of
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life
would continue to have their place.
Furthermore
, conventional
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skills
provide innovative
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ideas
to the development of
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modern
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technologies
.
For example
, sparkled by how the word “
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Love
” is
traditionally
knitted into a sweater by
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some
ethnic minority women in
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some
parts of Asia,
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some
business managers from textile industry have developed
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some
production lines by applying the
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traditional
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skills
to Computer-Aided Designs (CAD). The products have boosted the
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companies
’ sales which in turn have increased their investment in preserving
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traditional
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skills
for
further
developing their technologies.

To conclude
,
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traditional
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and
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life
styles are
increasingly
becoming a useful alternative to the homogeneity brought by global applications of
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modern
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technologies
.
However
, the evolution of
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technologies
is a selection process, whereby
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some
would become obsolete,
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but
there is no doubt that
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some
would thrive when their roles
are appreciated
.
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IELTS essay When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep them alive. with this opinion?

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