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Some people think students should study the science of food and how to prepare it. Others think that school time should be used in learning important subjects. Discuss both views and give your opinion? Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In the recent years, there has been a surge in the number of extra-curricular activities offered to students in schools. This leads to a frequently brought up question, should school time only be used for important subjects or should children be allowed to study subjects such as the science of food? A myriad of people believe that school time should be for learning important subjects only whereas Firstly, cultivating a childs interests from a young age can prove to be beneficial to both the child and thier future. The number of children who enjoy school soars dramatically when they are encouraged to pursue their interests. Time spent studying food science in school will undoubtedly spark an interest amongst youngsters. Secondly, this is a subtle and tactful way that prompts children to scrutinize their own eating habits thus improving overall health and consequently, lead to a decline in childhood obesity and a general awareness about health issues. In the future, science of food and how to prepare it will lead to substantail improvement in how our food is prepared as well as advocate healthy lifestyles such as veganism. Lastly, Some parents still feel sceptical about letting their children waste time studying unimportant subjects such as science of food. According to them, science of food and how to prepare it has no advantages in the real world. This could not be further from the truth as most youngsters who enjoy science of food will grow to be adults with healthy eating habits. Discouraging young children from being interested in healthy eating could invaldiate their childs future dreams. Furthermore, efforts to establish the uselessness of such subjects will always prove to be futile. I personally believe that with the recent surge in childhood obesity, children should be allowed to spend time learning about the science of food as it not only provides them with a sense of responsiblity towards their meals and health, it also constitutes strong principles that will stick with them for their entire life. To conclude, once veiwed from an unbiased point of view, it is clear that studying the science of food offers children the chance to develop early hobbies as well as consiousness about their health and eating habits,
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childs
interests from a young age can prove to be beneficial to both the child and
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thier
future. The number of
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children
who enjoy
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school
soars
dramatically
when they
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to pursue their interests.
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spent studying
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food
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science
in
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school
will
undoubtedly
spark an interest amongst youngsters.
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, this is a subtle and tactful way that prompts
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children
to scrutinize their
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own
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eating
habits
thus
improving
overall
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health
and
consequently
, lead to a decline in childhood obesity and a general awareness about
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health
issues. In the future,
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science
of
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food
and how to prepare it will lead to
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substantail
improvement in how our
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is prepared
as well
as advocate healthy lifestyles such as veganism.
Lastly
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parents
still
feel
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waste
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studying unimportant
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such as
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science
of
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food
. According to them,
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of
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food
and how to prepare it has no advantages in the real world. This could not be
further
from the truth as most youngsters who enjoy
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science
of
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food
will grow to be adults with healthy
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eating
habits. Discouraging young
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children
from
being interested
in healthy
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eating
could
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invaldiate
their
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childs
future dreams.
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, efforts to establish the uselessness of such
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will always prove to be futile.

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personally
believe that with the recent surge in childhood obesity,
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allowed
to spend
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learning about the
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of
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as it not
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provides them with a sense of
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responsiblity
towards their meals and
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also
constitutes strong principles that will stick with them for their entire life.

To conclude
, once
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veiwed
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clear
that studying the
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of
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offers
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children
the chance to develop early hobbies
as well
as
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consiousness
about their
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health
and
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IELTS essay Some people think students should study the science of food and how to prepare it. Others think that school time should be used in learning important subjects.

Essay
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5 paragraphs
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5.5
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