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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Some people think students should study the science of food and how to prepare it. Others think that school time should be used in learning important subjects. Discuss both views and give your opinion? Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

Some people think students should study the science of food and how to prepare it. Others think that school time should be used in learning important subjects. L7NR
People have differing views with regard to question how pupils utilized their school times. A number of people believe that students should always learn major subjects in school, while others argue that it is best for scholars if they acquire knowledge of extracurricular activities as well. In my opinion, I agree that not only major subjects but also learning various non-major activities are beneficial. First of all, if pupils learn how to make food and the importance of this food in a scientific way, it will assist them in future as an extra curriculum activity. In addition, they are able to learn a variety of subjects and not feeling bored for acquiring only academic information. Furthermore, the most important thing that they are acquiring knowledge about the science of food that will help them how to cook healthy food and the proper use of the ingredient. Consequently, they are able to be the fit person as well as free from illness. on the other hand, if they more focus on minor subjects instead of their major subjects, it will have an adverse impact on their marks in a final exam, hence they will fail in the main exam. Moreover, they also distract from their goals by these types of subjects. Finally, it is very vital for the pupils that they must be a focus on their major subjects. To put a nutshell, I feel that major subjects are the subjects that made the pupils succeed in their life; however, I strongly believe that extra curriculum knowledge especially in the food of science is vital for the students.
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utilized their school times. A number of
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believe that students should always learn
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in school, while others argue that it is best for scholars if they acquire knowledge of extracurricular activities
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. In my opinion, I
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learn how to
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make
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and the importance of this
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in a scientific way
, it will assist them in future as an extra curriculum activity.
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, they are able to learn a variety of
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subjects
and not feeling bored for acquiring
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academic information.
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, the most
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thing that they are acquiring knowledge about the science of
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food
that will
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them how to cook healthy
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food
and the proper
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of the ingredient.
Consequently
, they are able to be the fit person
as well
as free from illness.

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the other hand, if they more focus on minor
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instead
of their
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major
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subjects
, it will have an adverse impact on their marks in a final exam,
hence
they will fail in the main exam.
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, they
also
distract from their goals by these types of
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subjects
.
Finally
, it is
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vital for the
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pupils
that they
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must
be a focus on their
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major
subjects.

To put a nutshell, I feel that
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major
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subjects
are the
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subjects
that made the
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pupils
succeed in their life;
however
, I
strongly
believe that extra curriculum knowledge
especially
in the
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food
of science is vital for the students.
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IELTS essay Some people think students should study the science of food and how to prepare it. Others think that school time should be used in learning important subjects.

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4 paragraphs
267 words
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