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Some people think people is required to have education until 18 years ,do you agree or disagree

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Every person should be continued schooling until the completion of their teenage which makes the person suitable for the world and work. I totally agree with the statement which helps to lead their entire life proper discipline. Firstly, Education makes people mature, this maturity will help them to tackle and withstand infront of any situation. For instance, take a matured person, if he comes across a difficult thing in his life he just do want to escape for the problem or starts crying he will analyse the problem while being calm and conscious then he will take a problem clearing decision. If the same scenario gets infront of an immature then he will get depressed and finds ways to escape from the problem instead of resolving it. Secondly candidate who is educated knows difference between good and bad. For example, I have seen a lot of school dropout who are addicted to drinking, smoking and drugs, A few years ago there was a video gone viral in that bite of clip a small kid who is nearly 8 to 9 years was using drugs. he said that he can survive without eating food but he cannot live with taking drugs. In this his parents are uneducated along with him so, he thinks inhaling drugs is good if he is educated, he will know the difference between good and bad even though if his parents are literate, he has been warned to stop doing that harming things. If a person is educated it will become easy for him/her to get a job for his/her survival. In my opinion every individual should be educated until the completion of their adultescence age which help a person to be a good citizen of the country and helps the country to grow as it is said that today’s students/children are tomorrows future. It helps to preserve the ethics of person and a well-behaved person.
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should
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schooling until the completion of their teenage which
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makes
the
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person
suitable for the world and work. I
totally
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agree
with the statement which
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helps
to lead their entire life proper discipline.

Firstly
, Education
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makes
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people
mature, this maturity will
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help
them to tackle and withstand
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infront
of any situation.
For instance
, take a matured
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person
, if he
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comes
across a difficult thing in his life he
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do
want to escape for the
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problem
or
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starts
crying he will
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analyse
the
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problem
while being calm and conscious then he will take a
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problem
clearing decision. If the same scenario
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gets
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infront
of an immature then he will
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depressed and finds ways to escape from the
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problem
instead
of resolving it.

Secondly
candidate who is
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educated
knows difference between
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good
and
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bad
.
For example
, I have
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seen
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a lot of
school dropout who
are addicted
to drinking, smoking and
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drugs
, A few years ago there was a video gone viral in that bite of clip a
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small
kid who is
nearly
8 to 9 years was using
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drugs
.
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he
said that he can survive without eating food
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but
he cannot
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live
with taking
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drugs
. In this his parents
are uneducated
along with him
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so
, he
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thinks
inhaling
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drugs
is
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good
if he is
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educated
, he will know the difference between
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good
and
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bad
even though
if his parents are literate, he has
been warned
to
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stop
doing that harming things. If a
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person
is
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educated
it will become easy for him/her to
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get
a job for his/her survival.

In my opinion every individual should be
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educated
until the completion of their
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adultescence
age which
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help
a
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person
to be a
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good
citizen of the country and
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helps
the country to grow as it
is said
that
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today
’s students/children are tomorrows future. It
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helps
to preserve the ethics of
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person
and a well-behaved
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person
.
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IELTS essay Some people think people is required to have education until 18 years,

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