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Some people think parents should read or tell stories to children. While others think parents need not do that as children can read, watch TV or movies by themselves. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

A few individuals argue that a father and mother ought to read and tell stories to their child. However, other people opposite to say that nowdays juvenile do independently stuff like reading books and watching movies online. This essay discuss both views and in my opinion, parents has more influence on their children compare to advance technology. To commence with, there are numerous reasons why parents narrate their stories to children. The first and foremost is children has greater influence from their parents whatever they buy child can follow. This is to say that learning and effectiveness has higher in parents story. If parents regularly tell them children also get happy. Although children get bored, they feel relaxed after listening to it. For instance, in county India where mostly at time of night parents always tell stories to their child after that they sleep well. Henceforth, parents way of narrating is more unique and likelyhood. However, owing to technological advancement in today's era, child become independent. Although, they do not know how to read, they easily access mobiles easily. So, nowdays parents has not more obligation like telling stories everyday. Now child can do by self. For example, as per times of India reported that about half of percentage of child know how to use mobile phone and they easily do work in it. Hence, technology has made them independent and they can easily do anything. In conclusion, even though some think that parents has more influence. I firmly believe that children can easily learn through internet and no need listen to from their parents.
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both views and in my opinion,
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parents
has more influence on their
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children
compare to advance technology.

To commence with, there are numerous reasons why
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parents
narrate their
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stories
to
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children
. The
first
and foremost is
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children
has greater influence from their
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parents
whatever they
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buy
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child
can follow. This is to say that learning and effectiveness has higher in
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parents
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story
.
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If
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regularly
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them
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also
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happy. Although
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bored, they feel relaxed after listening to it.
For instance
, in county India where
mostly
at time of night
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parents
always
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tell
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stories
to their
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after that they sleep well. Henceforth,
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parents
way of narrating is more unique and
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likelyhood
.

However
, owing to technological advancement in
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today
's era,
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child
become independent. Although, they do not know how to read, they
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easily
access mobiles
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easily
.
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,
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nowdays
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parents
has not more obligation like telling
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.
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Now
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can do by self.
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, as per times of India reported that about half of percentage of
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child
know how to
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use
mobile
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phone and
they
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easily
do work in it.
Hence
, technology has made them
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independent and
they can
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do anything.

In conclusion
,
even though
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that
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has more influence. I
firmly
believe that
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children
can
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easily
learn through internet and no need listen to from their
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parents
.

IELTS essay Some people think parents should read or tell stories to children. While others think parents need not do that as children can read, watch TV or movies by themselves.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
265 words
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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