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Some people think parents are responsible for transporting their children to school. Other think it is government’s responsibility. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people think parents are responsible for transporting their children to school. Other think it is government’s responsibility. V963
There has been debate about who among government and parents are responsible for transporting students to the school. In my opinion, it should be government’s responsibility and reasons for the same are multifold which are discussed in the essay below. Firstly, governments all around the world have been promoting car pooling to combat the detrimental effects of global warming caused by carbon emission. Hence, if government takes up this responsibility, all students can reach to the school in a single vehicle which might have a positive impact on air quality of the vicinity. Secondly, all students come from different social-economic and domestic backgrounds. Some students are independently managing their transport to the school via public transport in case if both parents are working full-time. This can compromise the safety of students and make them susceptible to thieves, burglars or random strangers who might harm them if not supervised. Hence, governmental school transport can provide good and safe environment for students to mingle up and make new friends. On the other hand, even though it has significant advantages, it’s negative impacts are incontrovertible. In this fast-paced world, some parents get time to spend with their children while commuting. Also, if the government aided school transportation is not supervised, students can become victim of bullying by their peers and seniors. This can have a serious repercussions on physical and mental health of an individual. To reiterate, advantages of government aided school transport largely overweighs its negative side. Hence, government should take up the responsibility of transporting students to the school in safe and protected environment under the supervision.
There has been debate about who among
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government
and parents are responsible for transporting
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students
to the
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school
. In my opinion, it should be
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government’s
responsibility and reasons for the same are
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multifold
which
are discussed
in the essay below.

Firstly
,
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governments
all around the world have been promoting car pooling to combat the detrimental effects of global warming caused by carbon emission.
Hence
, if
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government
takes up this responsibility, all
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students
can reach to the
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school
in a single vehicle which might have a
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positive
impact on air quality of the vicinity.
Secondly
, all
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students
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come
from
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different
social-economic and domestic backgrounds.
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Some
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students
are
independently
managing their
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transport
to the
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school
via public
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transport
in case if both parents are working full-time. This can compromise the safety of
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students
and
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make
them susceptible to thieves, burglars or random strangers who might harm them if not supervised.
Hence
, governmental
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school
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transport
can provide
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good
and safe environment for
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students
to mingle up and
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make
new friends.

On the other hand
,
even though
it has significant advantages, it’s
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negative
impacts are incontrovertible. In this
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fast
-paced world,
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some
parents
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get
time to spend with their children while commuting.
Also
, if the
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government
aided
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school
transportation is not supervised,
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students
can become victim of bullying by their peers and seniors. This can have a serious
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repercussions
on physical and mental health of an individual.

To reiterate, advantages of
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government
aided
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school
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transport
largely
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overweighs
its
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negative
side.
Hence
,
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government
should take up the responsibility of transporting
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students
to the
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school
in safe and protected environment under the supervision.
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IELTS essay Some people think parents are responsible for transporting their children to school. Other think it is government’s responsibility.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
266 words
5.5
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