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Some people think news has no connection to people's live. So then it is a waste of time to read the newspaper and watch television

Some people think news has no connection to people's live. So then it is a waste of time to read the newspaper and watch television yrNd
It is argued that there is no use in reading newspapers and watching news programs on Television. Now many information which unreliable and unnecessary. Even if the news was reliable there lots of information and people needed much time to read it with newspaper or to watch it on the TV. There are many types of social networks in the world and people often use of them. Through social networks we can get a lot of information. In my country Many people use social networks such as Instagram, telegram, Facebook and etcetera. I guess read or watch much news is pointless. Because when people get many information their brain will accept it and think about it and this leads to the fact that the brain will be tired. Many's read it during the work. It leads to productivity decreases. But on the other hand If news be about our profession it would be helpful. In conclusion I can say that it is unnecessary to read no connection information.
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that there is no
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in reading newspapers and watching
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many
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which unreliable and unnecessary.

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was reliable there lots of
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and
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people
needed much time to
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it with newspaper or to
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it on the TV. There are
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many
types of social networks in the world and
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people
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often
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use
of them.

Through social networks we can
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a lot of
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. In my country
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people
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use
social networks such as Instagram, telegram, Facebook and etcetera. I guess
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or
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much
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is pointless.
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people
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many
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their brain will accept it and
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think
about it and this leads to the fact that the brain will
be tired
.
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's
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read
it during the work. It leads to productivity decreases.
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on the other
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If
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be about our profession it would be helpful. In
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conclusion I
can say that it is unnecessary to
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no connection
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IELTS essay Some people think news has no connection to people's live. So then it is a waste of time to read the newspaper and watch television

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
168 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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