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Some people think men and women have different natural abilities that make them suitable for different types of work. Others, however, believe that both men and women can be equally suited to do any type of work. v.1

Some people think men and women have different natural abilities that make them suitable for different types of work. Others, however, believe that both men and women can be equally suited to do any type of work. v. 1
Whether men and women have equal capability to do any job or the type of work they do should be based on their natural features and inherent abilities is a widely debated issue. While some believe that both genders have an equal aptitude to do any sort of work, others, however, deny it and profess that nature has created men and women differently so that they become more suitable for particular jobs. This essay delves this issue and then draw a sensible conclusion. A group of people opine that men and women are not physically that much different. Apart from that, men and women possess the same natural abilities, thinking patterns, needs and instincts. Since women are kept mostly inside houses, they react differently than men in different situations. If both men and women are given the equal opportunity and experience, they can both handle any job with the same efficiency. Thus this group of people deny that men are better in some selective jobs while women could outperform men in some jobs. As an evidence, they say that in the past women were deprived of education, job and other social activities and because of that number of women in higher positions was only a few. Another group, however, remains strict to the fact that men and women have different physical and mental capacities and these capacities make them more suitable for different types of professions. For instance, a woman is a natural caregiver and hence nursing is a more suitable profession for her. On the contrary construction works, one example of such many professions is suitable for men. In conclusion, looking at the rest of the living creatures in the world we can observe that tasks for men and women are determined mostly by their natural abilities and this is a natural law. Denying it would not be a good idea and in my opinion, no task is less important and thus distinctive professions makes them perform better.
Whether
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and
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have equal capability to do any
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job
or the type of work they do should
be based
on their
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natural
features and inherent abilities is a
widely
debated issue. While
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some
believe that both genders have an equal aptitude to do any sort of work, others,
however
, deny it and profess that nature has created
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men
and
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women
differently
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so
that they become more
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suitable
for particular
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jobs
. This essay delves this issue and then draw a sensible conclusion.

A group of
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people
opine that
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men
and
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women
are not
physically
that much
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different
. Apart from that,
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men
and
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women
possess the same
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natural
abilities, thinking patterns, needs and instincts. Since
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women
are
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kept
mostly
inside
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houses
, they react
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differently
than
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men
in
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different
situations. If both
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men
and
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women
are
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given
the equal opportunity and experience, they can both handle any
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job
with the same efficiency.
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Thus
this group of
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people
deny that
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men
are better in
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some
selective
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jobs
while
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women
could outperform
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men
in
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some
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jobs
. As an evidence, they say that in the past
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women
were deprived
of education,
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job
and other social activities and
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because
of that number of
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women
in higher positions was
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only
a few.

Another group,
however
, remains strict to the fact that
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men
and
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women
have
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different
physical and mental capacities and these capacities
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make
them more
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suitable
for
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different
types of
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professions
.
For instance
, a woman is a
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natural
caregiver and
hence
nursing is a more
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suitable
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profession
for her.
On the contrary
construction works, one example of such
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many
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professions
is
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suitable
for
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men
.

In conclusion
, looking at the rest of the living creatures in the world we can observe that tasks for
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men
and
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women
are determined
mostly
by their
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natural
abilities and this is a
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natural
law. Denying it would not be a
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good
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idea
and in my opinion, no task is less
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important
and
thus
distinctive
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professions
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makes
them perform better.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
44Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think men and women have different natural abilities that make them suitable for different types of work. Others, however, believe that both men and women can be equally suited to do any type of work. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
329 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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