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Some people think it’s the government’s responsibility to tackle environmental issues. Others believe it is up to each individual to be environmentally responsible.

Some people think it’s the government’s responsibility to tackle environmental issues. Others believe it is up to each individual to be environmentally responsible. AOew
There have been a lot of debates about government’s responsibility over last decades and it recurs more often and often. Most people argue that the environmental issues are related to obligation of the government and ordinary people do not have to undertake anything to protect it while the other individuals deem that environment problems pertains to each person that inhabits it. Therefore, this essay tries to cover both of mentioned views and would suggest an appropriate way to solve the given issue. Those who support this opinion that it is government’s responsibility to tackle environmental issues present a variety of reasons in favour of their idea. First of all, population of all the countries possesses their own jobs which take a long time concentrating and energy. Thus, they suppose that it is the state’s work to solve global problems which, as humans believe, do not pertain to them. Furthermore, most people got used to that all problems and issues of the country are solved by government. In fact, the number of those who do not have a desire to protect ecology is increasing and array of them a merely are more accessible to blame government in environment deterioration by doing oil and gas businesses. Some people worry about the mentioned trend as environmental condition of the Earth has to be being enhanced by the government. Actually, they deem that it is a warning from the nature to the all inhabitants, including normal people that ecology is getting worse and people need to take the situation under the control all together. So, if the steps are not taken for this case, the ecological condition will decrease and there will be no significant and respectable place to live at all. At the end of the day, I consider, therefore, this occasion is such a sophisticated issue and both views of points are expressing the margin between the government and the nation about environment. In this case, the only realistic solution is association of all inhabitants to protect the Earth. By putting this way, the whole population has to accept needed responsibilities and volunteer for ecology.
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debates about
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responsibility over last

decades and it recurs more
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and
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. Most
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people
argue that the

environmental issues
are related
to obligation of the
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government
and ordinary

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people
do not
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have to
undertake anything to protect it while the other individuals

deem that environment problems pertains to each person that inhabits it.
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this essay tries to cover both of mentioned views and would suggest an appropriate

way to solve the
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given
issue.

Those who support this opinion that it is
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government’s
responsibility to tackle

environmental issues present a variety of reasons in
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favour
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First of all
, population of all the countries possesses their
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own
jobs which take a long time

concentrating and energy.
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, they suppose that it is the state’s work to solve

global problems which, as humans believe, do not pertain to them.
Furthermore
,

most
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people
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got
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used
to that all problems and issues of the country
are solved
by

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government
. In fact, the number of those who do not have a desire to protect

ecology is increasing and array of them a
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are more accessible to blame

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government
in environment deterioration by doing oil and gas businesses.

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Some
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people
worry about the mentioned trend as environmental condition of the

Earth
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has to
be
being enhanced
by the
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government
. Actually, they deem that it is a

warning from the nature to the all inhabitants, including normal
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people
that

ecology is getting worse and
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people
need to take the situation under the control all

together.
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So
, if the steps are not taken for this case, the ecological condition will

decrease and there will be no significant and respectable place to
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live
at all.

At the
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end
of the day, I consider,
therefore
, this occasion is such a sophisticated

issue and both views of points are expressing the margin between the
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government


and the nation about environment.
In this case
, the
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only
realistic solution is

association of all inhabitants to protect the Earth. By putting this way, the whole

population
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has to
accept needed responsibilities and volunteer for ecology.
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IELTS essay Some people think it’s the government’s responsibility to tackle environmental issues. Others believe it is up to each individual to be environmentally responsible.

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
353 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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