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Write about the following topic. It is sometimes said that ‘travel broadens the mind’. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

It is sometimes said that ‘travel broadens the mind’. with this? PJAK
It is a most common perception that visiting different places or countries contributes to increasing the tendency of our brain to get new ideas. I completely agree with the statement in the light of fact that it improves our knowledge about a different culture and their way of doing things differently. The best method to learn about any society or religion is by visiting that place due to the fact that it provides us an opportunity to know the people of that area more closely. For example, if we want to know better about what people eat in a particular region and why they eat that particular food, then we have to go there and see the weather conditions and availability of food. Similarly, the fastest way to learn a language is surrounded by the persons who speak that language. Knowledge of different languages and cultures helps us to increase our connection throughout the world which leads our mind to think out of the box. When we go out to different places other than our home town then we get a chance to learn different approaches to do a specific task more conveniently and economically. Exploring new cities helps us to get new ideas, for instance in small villages farmer completely depends on rain and river water for good cultivation whereas in big town farmers uses modern techniques, like temperature-controlled cultivation, which reduces the uses of water and dependence of a farmer on water. In conclusion,  I would say traveling to new places opens our brain to new ideas and also teach us a new technique to do our regular work more conveniently and effectively.
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. I completely
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with the statement in the light of fact that it
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improves
our knowledge about a
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different
culture and their way of doing things
differently
.

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place
due to the fact that it provides us an opportunity to know the
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people
of that area more
closely
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eat in a particular region and why they eat that particular food, then we
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go there and
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the weather conditions and availability of food.
Similarly
, the fastest way to learn a language
is surrounded
by the persons who speak that language. Knowledge of
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different
languages and cultures
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helps
us to increase our connection throughout the world which leads our mind to
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think
out of the box.

When we go out to
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different
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places
other than our home town then we
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get
a chance to learn
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different
approaches to do a specific task more
conveniently
and
economically
. Exploring
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new
cities
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helps
us to
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,
for instance
in
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small
villages farmer completely depends on rain and river water for
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good
cultivation whereas in
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big
town farmers
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uses
modern techniques, like temperature-controlled cultivation, which
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reduces
the
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uses
of water and dependence of a farmer on water.

In conclusion
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I would say traveling to
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new
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places
opens our brain to
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new
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ideas
and
also
teach us a
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new
technique to do our regular work more
conveniently
and
effectively
.
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IELTS essay It is sometimes said that ‘travel broadens the mind’. with this?

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  American English
4 paragraphs
274 words
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