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some people think its better for children to grow up in the city while others think that life in the countryside is more suitable what are the advantages and disadvantages of both places. v.1

some people think its better for children to grow up in the city while others think that life in the countryside is more suitable what are the advantages and disadvantages of both places. v. 1
There is a divided opinion on the location of a child's upbringing. While a majority of people feel a child growing up in the city provides better overall growth, a select few seem to strongly oppose the idea and feel that life in the countryside leads to a healthier lifestyle overall. This essay discusses the pro's and con's of a child's growth in both the countryside and the city. There are two main benefits for children growing up in cities: Good education and easily available facilities. Metropolitan cities generally tend to be the hub for quality education. With schools promoting the usage of English as a first language, children acquire fluency of the language with greater ease. However, this is not the case in villages. Although some schemes have been implemented to improve the situation, there is still a room for improvement as far as education is concerned. Furthermore, all the necessary facilities for daily needs are easily accessible in cities as compared to the countryside. For example, there are still some rural areas which do not have access to hospitals, whereas the same in a city is just a stone's throw away. Despite the drawbacks of living in the countryside, there are some advantages as well. Children growing up in the rural areas gain more exposure to the deep cultural roots of the country as compared to that of cities. A lot of this will directly influence the values and behaviour of the children as they grow up. Moreover, cities are more prone to pollution and various other environmental problems which will have an adverse effect on the health of children. But on the other hand, rural areas are affected less on this aspect. This allows kids to have a healthier lifestyle during the tender age. We have considered the various advantages and disadvantages that cities and villages have to offer. Both have their own benefits and drawbacks. In my opinion, raising children in cities is a far better option as they have more access to facilities, good education which form the basis for better overall growth.
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people
feel a child growing up in the city provides better
overall
growth, a select few seem to
strongly
oppose the
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idea
and feel that life in the
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countryside
leads to a healthier lifestyle
overall
. This essay discusses the pro's and con's of a child's growth in both the
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countryside
and the city.

There are two main benefits for
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children
growing up in
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cities
:
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Good
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education
and
easily
available facilities. Metropolitan
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cities
generally
tend to be the hub for quality
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education
. With schools promoting the usage of English as a
first
language,
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children
acquire fluency of the language with greater
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ease
.
However
, this is not the case in villages. Although
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some
schemes have
been implemented
to
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improve
the situation, there is
still
a room for improvement as far as
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education
is concerned
.
Furthermore
, all the necessary facilities for daily needs are
easily
accessible in
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cities
as compared to the
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countryside
.
For example
, there are
still
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some
rural areas which do not have access to hospitals, whereas the same in a city is
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just
a stone's throw away.

Despite the drawbacks of living in the
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countryside
, there are
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some
advantages
as well
.
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Children
growing up in the rural areas gain more exposure to the deep cultural roots of the country as compared to that of
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cities
.
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A lot of
this will
directly
influence the values and
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behaviour
of the
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children
as they grow up.
Moreover
,
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cities
are more prone to pollution and various other environmental problems which will have an adverse effect on the health of
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children
.
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But
on the other hand
, rural areas are
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affected
less on this aspect. This
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allows
kids to have a healthier lifestyle during the tender age.

We have considered the various advantages and disadvantages that
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cities
and villages
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have to
offer. Both have their
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own
benefits and drawbacks. In my opinion, raising
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children
in
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cities
is a far better option as they have more access to facilities,
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good
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education
which form the basis for better
overall
growth.
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IELTS essay some people think its better for children to grow up in the city while others think that life in the countryside is more suitable what are the advantages and disadvantages of both places. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
348 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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