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Write about the following topic: Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

: Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent. 2dQo
According to some people, they think that student should have gain knowledge from school that how to be a good parent. I am disagreeing this statement due to the fact that students at school are at a very young age. They should teach about their career goals and how to be a good person in real life. Then, they will become a good parent by themselves. In my opinion, most of the schools in Pakistan students are not getting their proper knowledge of their lesson and teaching them how to be a good parent will an additional task to them at a very young age. This topic is very important in our life. However, students have to learn this topic in their universities. According to Pakistan's criteria of marriage and studies, there are a lot of students after completing their bachelors or university they are getting married. At an early age, they are forcefully involved in this relationship by the choice of their family. Moreover, they should not learn this topic in school otherwise they will only think about marriage and after marriage life. Students of Pakistan are not getting a chance to be part of a corporate world only 30% of students are aware of this. If we want to familiarize students with this topic at a young age, then we have to teach them about how to be responsible people in life. Then they will learn automatically that how to be a responsible parent.
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person in real life. Then, they will become a
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are not getting their proper knowledge of their lesson and teaching them how to be a
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will an additional task to them at a
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in their universities. According to Pakistan's criteria of marriage and studies, there are
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after completing their bachelors or university they are getting married. At an early
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, they are
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involved in this relationship by the choice of their family.
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are aware of this. If we want to familiarize
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with this
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at a young
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teach them about how to be responsible
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people
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learn


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IELTS essay : Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
246 words
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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