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In developing countries, rural children have less access to education. Some people say that the problem can be solved by providing schools and teachers. Others say that computers and internet should be provided. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

In developing countries, rural children have less access to education. Some people say that the problem can be solved by providing schools and teachers. Others say that computers and internet should be provided. NgPj
It is incontrovertible that pedagogy is not appropriate in country-side. Rural students do not have much access to education in developing nations. Few groups argued that the problem can be resolved by giving institutes and tutors while others believe that laptops and internet facility must be provided. This essay will discuss both the views in detail. To begin with, there are number of pros if the government can try to solved the education problem by constructing schools and assigned teachers. Firstly, it can be seen as beneficials for both government and inhabitants. If government builds a educational building in rural area then it is a physical growth of that particular area. And it also rises job opportunities for people as new schools will be constructed, eventually, it leaves positive affects on joblessness level of developing nations. In addition, it is also helpful for any government work such as vaccinatinos, Census procedures, and so on. For example, In India nowadays, vaccination against Coronavirus is held in government school at nearby area. On the contrary, others having conflicting views. There would be also a plenty of benefits if computers and internet are available in country-side for education purpose. This is because it open the gates from which one can learn plenty of latest technology such as Artificial Intelligence, Machine Learning and so on, as every little things now asscessible by using internet and personal computers. For example, CM of Delhi recently announced that, they will soon start a programe based on principle of "Anywhere Living, Anytime Learing" in order to provide education in rural area nearyby Delhi. However, it should be quite challenging in India to provide internet to the every village of country as majority of dwellers are survive their. In conclusion, I think, both the views have their own significance. But still I believe that, government ought to supply computers and internet facilities to villages, hence, it definately boosted country's educational ratio as students could be learn anything at anytime from anywhere.
It is incontrovertible that pedagogy is not appropriate in country-side. Rural students do not have much access to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
in developing nations. Few groups argued that the problem can
be resolved
by giving institutes and tutors while others believe that laptops and internet facility
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be provided
. This essay will discuss both the views in detail.

To
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begin
with, there are number of pros if the
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government
can try
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to solved
the
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education
problem by constructing schools and assigned teachers.
Firstly
, it can be
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seen
as
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beneficials
for both
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government
and inhabitants. If
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government
builds
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a
educational building in rural
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area
then it is a physical growth of that particular
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area
. And it
also
rises job opportunities for
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people
as new schools will
be constructed
,
eventually
, it
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leaves
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positive
affects on joblessness level of developing nations.
In addition
, it is
also
helpful for any
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government
work such as
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vaccinatinos
, Census procedures, and
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so
on.
For example
, In India nowadays, vaccination against Coronavirus
is held
in
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government
school at nearby
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area
.
On the contrary
, others having conflicting views.

There would be
also
a
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plenty
of benefits if computers and internet are available in country-side for
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education
purpose. This is
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because
it open the gates from which one can learn
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plenty
of
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latest
technology such as Artificial Intelligence, Machine Learning and
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so
on, as every
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little
things
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now
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asscessible
by using internet and personal computers.
For example
, CM of Delhi recently announced that, they will
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soon
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start
a
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programe
based on principle of
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"
Anywhere Living, Anytime
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Learing
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"
in order to provide
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education
in rural
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area
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nearyby
Delhi.
However
, it should be quite challenging in India to provide internet to the every village of country as
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majority of
dwellers are
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survive
their.

In conclusion
, I
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think
, both the views have their
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own
significance.
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But
still
I believe that,
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government
ought to supply computers and internet facilities to villages,
hence
, it
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definately
boosted country's educational ratio as students could be
Consider using the past participle "learned", "learnt"?
learn
anything at anytime from anywhere.
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IELTS essay In developing countries, rural children have less access to education. Some people say that the problem can be solved by providing schools and teachers. Others say that computers and internet should be provided.

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