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Some people think it is better for children to grown up in the city, while others think that life in the countryside is more suitable for them. What are the advantages and disadvantages of both places? v.10

Some people think it is better for children to grown up in the city, while others think that life in the countryside is more suitable for them. What are the advantages and disadvantages of both places? v. 10
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Regardless, of the benefits there are some issue which children face in city, such as, obesity as they prefer mobile games over going out in park for taking part in physical activities. In conclusion, Although country side has benefits like pollution free environment for the children, however, I believe there are < pwa data-pwa-id=" pwa-23E57B3C9AA24F827D2E3E9E466BBDF6" data-pwa-rule-id=" READABILITY_212" data-pwa-category=" style" data-pwa-hint=" Readability may be enhanced by removing this" data-pwa-suggestions=" (omit)" data-pwa-heavy=" false" data-pwa-dictionary-word=" clearly " class=" pwa-mark pwa-mark-done" > clearly& nbsp; < /pwa> plethora of benefits of growing children in city, as it provide them more career opportunity by the use of technology in the education sector.
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IELTS essay Some people think it is better for children to grown up in the city, while others think that life in the countryside is more suitable for them. What are the advantages and disadvantages of both places? v. 10

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
730 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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