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Some people think it is better for children to grow up in cities wheras others think it is better in villages. Discuss the advantages and the disadvantages of both

Some people think it is better for children to grow up in cities wheras others think it is better in villages. Discuss the advantages and the disadvantages of both nRDVl
Most people around us are concerned about their children. Their concerns vary from the quality of pencil the kid would use to their kid’s ambition achievement. Currently, one of the concerns shared among parents is the surroundings in which their kid should grow. In my opinion both cities and villages possess advantages and disadvantages. In case of cities, the quality of education and medical facilities would be the main attraction. The standard of living is mainly dependent of these two factors of life. Education is considered as one of the main factors in the overall development of the child. Schools with high reputation and international standards ought to prepare students for the next generation challenges of life. When it comes to villages, it’s mostly about the quality of air and the innocent people they mingle with. Children living in villages are more committed towards their families and friends. The character development would fully be dependent on their parents whom the kids look forward as their super heroes of life. On the contrary, city life is a busy and structured life where people have no time to care for others. Lack of playgrounds and friends might lead the kid into a stressful life. Interaction with peers and facing challenges during each stage of life is quite necessary in the upbringing of a child. Villages on the other hand has some disadvantages too, one is the quality of people they mingle with. Most children in villages would be interacting with socially low-profile people. Overall, as every situation has got both advantages and disadvantages, cities and villages has got its own roles in the development of the children.
Most
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people
around us
are concerned
about their
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children
. Their concerns vary from the
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quality
of pencil the
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kid
would
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use
to their
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kid’s
ambition achievement.
Currently
, one of the concerns shared among parents is the surroundings in which their
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kid
should grow. In my opinion both
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cities
and
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villages
possess advantages and disadvantages.

In case of
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cities
, the
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quality
of education and medical facilities would be the main attraction. The standard of living is
mainly
dependent of these two factors of
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life
. Education
is considered
as one of the main factors in the
overall
development of the child. Schools with high reputation and international standards ought to prepare students for the
next
generation challenges of life.

When it
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comes
to
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villages
, it’s
mostly
about the
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quality
of air and the innocent
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people
they mingle with.
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Children
living in
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villages
are more committed towards their families and friends. The character development would
fully
be dependent on their parents whom the
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kids
look forward as their super heroes of life.

On the contrary
, city
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life
is a busy and structured
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life
where
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people
have no time to care for others. Lack of playgrounds and friends might lead the
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kid
into a stressful
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life
. Interaction with peers and facing challenges during each stage of
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life
is quite necessary in the upbringing of a child.

Villages
on the other hand
has
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some
disadvantages too, one is the
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quality
of
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people
they mingle with. Most
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children
in
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villages
would be interacting with
socially
low-profile
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people
.

Overall
, as every situation has
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both advantages and disadvantages,
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cities
and
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villages
has
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got
its
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own
roles in the development of the
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children
.
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IELTS essay Some people think it is better for children to grow up in cities wheras others think it is better in villages. Discuss the advantages and the disadvantages of both

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