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It is argued that money should be spent on roads and motorways more than on public transport systems, I personally disagree with this idea because I believe that both two transportation systems are very important, and they should be invested equally. On the one hand, enhancing roadways and motorways can reduce the number of accidents. For example, in Hanoi city, there are a plethora of places where traffic is congested because the roads are too small and narrow, they need to be widened. Furthermore, if the roads and motorways expanded, cities will look more civilized and attractive, which attract tourists and improve the tourism industry On the other hand, the public transport systems are one of the most essential demands of those who do not have their private transports. Take for example, I take a bus to go to my school and every day in light of the fact that I do not have a motorbike. Besides, public transport systems contribute to the reduction of air pollution. In fact, public transport will help restrict private vehicles which can cause pollution by smog. In conclusion, not only roads and motorways but also public transport systems should be a fair investment for them.

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roads
 and motorways more than on You use this word too often, consider replacing it withurbanmutualciviccivilnationalcommunal
public
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transport
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systems
, I personally
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idea
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because
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systems
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, and they should be invested
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.

On the one hand, enhancing roadways and motorways can This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :alleviate
reduce
 the number of accidents. For example
, in Hanoi city, there are a plethora of places where traffic is congested
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because
 the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withroadwaylaneboulevardthoroughfarecoursetrack
roads
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small
 and narrow, they need to be widened
. Furthermore
, if the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withroadwaylaneboulevardthoroughfarecoursetrack
roads
 and motorways expanded, cities will look more civilized and attractive, which attract tourists and This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :ameliorate
improve
 the tourism industry

On the other hand
, the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withurbanmutualciviccivilnationalcommunal
public
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transport
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systems
 are one of the most essential demands of those who do not have their private You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtransittransportationshipmentshipping
transports
. Take for example
, I take a bus to go to my school and every day in light of the fact that I do not have a motorbike. Besides
, You use this word too often, consider replacing it withurbanmutualciviccivilnationalcommunal
public
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transport
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systems
 contribute to the reduction of air pollution. In fact, You use this word too often, consider replacing it withurbanmutualciviccivilnationalcommunal
public
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transport
 will This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :assistassistance
help
 restrict private vehicles which can cause pollution by smog.

In conclusion
, not This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
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roads
 and motorways This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
also
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withurbanmutualciviccivilnationalcommunal
public
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transport
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withorganizationschemerulestructurearrangement
systems
 should be a This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :equitable
fair
 investment for them. 