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Some people think healthcare should be made free for all people by government. Others believe individual should pay medical cost for themselves. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

Some people think healthcare should be made free for all people by government. Others believe individual should pay medical cost for themselves. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion jQDL1
In today’s time, everyone is very self-conscious about their health and well-being. On the contrary, few believe that the services they get from hospitals should be free from the government, while others argue and prefer to pay for it themselves. So, I would like to highlight both areas and also share my views on this matter. Firstly, the healthcare sector is considered to be important for our society, since most of the people visit the hospital for treatments and daily check-ups. Furthermore, the government invests a lot of money in this sector. For example, hospitals require advanced medical equipment or foreign medicines, which tend to be expensive to export from another country. In addition, there is many maintenances cost in hospitals, such as electricity, which needs to be paid regularly. As a result, our government cannot cover all these expenses. Therefore, it is better to pay for all services and medicines being offer to us. Secondly, in many parts of the world individuals do not have access to adequate medical facilities. Even if it does, it is very expensive. In India, for example, hospital services tend to be costly, only then does it become a problem for those with chronic illnesses who need adequate medical assistance, or for those who fall below the poverty line and cannot even afford medication and treatment. For this reason, many choose to die rather than live without food. In such a case, the government should not charge them or give them any form of subsidy. In conclusion, it can be said that there are a number of communities around the world that do not have adequate access to health care facilities. In my opinion, such places should be free. At the same time, we are not discriminating and everyone gets the right medical care. Therefore, we are creating disease-free society.
In
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today
’s time, everyone is
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very
self-conscious about their health and well-being.
On the contrary
, few believe that the services they
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get
from
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hospitals
should be free from the
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government
, while others argue and prefer to pay for it themselves.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
, I would like to highlight both areas and
also
share my views on this matter.

Firstly
, the healthcare sector
is considered
to be
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
for our society, since most of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
visit the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
hospital
for treatments and daily
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
check
-ups.
Furthermore
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
invests
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a lot of
money in this sector.
For example
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
hospitals
require advanced
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
medical
equipment or foreign medicines, which tend to be expensive to export from another country.
In addition
, there is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
maintenances cost in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
hospitals
, such as electricity, which needs to
be paid
regularly
.
As a result
, our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
cannot cover all these expenses.
Therefore
, it is better to pay for all services and medicines being
Consider using a past participle here: "offered".
offer
to us.

Secondly
, in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
parts of the world individuals do not have access to adequate
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
medical
facilities. Even if it does, it is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
expensive. In India,
for example
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
hospital
services tend to be costly,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
then does it become a problem for those with chronic illnesses who need adequate
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
medical
assistance, or for those who fall below the poverty line and cannot even afford medication and treatment.
For this reason
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
choose to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
die
rather
than
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
without food. In such a case, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
should not charge them or give them any form of subsidy.

In conclusion
, it can
be said
that there are a number of communities around the world that do not have adequate access to health care facilities.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
In
my opinion, such places should be free. At the same time, we are not discriminating and everyone
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
gets
the right
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
medical
care.
Therefore
, we are creating disease-free society.
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IELTS essay Some people think healthcare should be made free for all people by government. Others believe individual should pay medical cost for themselves. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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