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Some people think frequent short vacations are good while others argue that long term locations are helpful.discuss the advantages and disadvantages of both and give opinion.

Some people think frequent short vacations are good while others argue that long term locations are helpful. discuss the advantages and disadvantages of both and give opinion. PVLyE
Vacations are considered as a fascinating part of everyone's life, especially for school children. That is why it is often argued that whether multiple short vacations or a single long vacation would be better for school children. Due to the difference of perception both have their own importance, but I think that long-term vacations can be really beneficial for the school going students. This essay will enunciate my views as well as the advantages of both the vacations in the ext paragraphs. There are a number of advantages of long vacations such as students can join coaching classes like football coaching, swimming classes or any vocational training which can help the scholar to enhance their knowledge in that particular field. Meanwhile, the students are able to find part-time jobs that would not only reduce the burden of finances on the parents, but also help them to have a real world experience of that specific skillsets. Consequently, they can choose this field as a career and can get highly paid offers from popular companies. In this way, the pupils become more responsible and passionate towards their duties which is the indication of the overall development. Apart from this, students may also have a chance to meet their near and dear ones who are living abroad that might add to make the relationships stronger as well as one has the chance to visit different locations. Moving to the advantages of short week vacations, that is also quite beneficial for students as these frequent breaks to help them to get a relax and refresh during the study. These days off can make them mentally strong and relaxed which prevent Them from being exhausted. Frequent breaks help the Juniors to spend quality time with family members and help them to become socially extrovert, which ultimately benefit them to improve communication skill. To conclude, frequent and long-term breaks during academic sessions provides various benefits to the students. However the advantages of long-term brakes are eye-catching and benefit the scholar during a long run in their life and progressing their overall development.
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Vacations
are considered
as a fascinating part of everyone's life,
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for school children.
That is
why it is
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argued that whether multiple short
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vacations
or a single long
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vacation
would be better for school children. Due to the difference of perception both have their
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own
importance,
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but
I
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think
that long-term
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vacations
can be
really
beneficial for the school going
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students
. This essay will enunciate my views
as well
as the
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advantages
of both the
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vacations
in the ext paragraphs.

There are a number of
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advantages
of long
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vacations
such as
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students
can
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join
coaching classes like football coaching, swimming classes or any vocational training which can
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help
the scholar to enhance their knowledge in that particular field. Meanwhile, the
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students
are able to find part-time jobs that would not
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only
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reduce
the burden of finances on the parents,
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but
also
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help
them to have a real world experience of that specific
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skillsets
.
Consequently
, they can choose this field as a career and can
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get
highly
paid offers from popular
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companies
. In this way, the pupils become more responsible and passionate towards their duties which is the indication of the
overall
development. Apart from this,
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students
may
also
have a chance to
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meet
their near and dear ones who are living abroad that might
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add
to
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make
the relationships stronger
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as
well as one has the chance to visit
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different
locations.

Moving to the
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advantages
of short week
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vacations
,
that is
also
quite beneficial for
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students
as these frequent breaks to
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help
them to
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get
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a relax
and refresh during the study. These days off can
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make
them mentally strong and relaxed which
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prevent
Them from
being exhausted
. Frequent breaks
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help
the Juniors to spend quality time with family members and
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help
them to become
socially
extrovert, which
ultimately
benefit them to
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improve
communication
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skill
.

To conclude
, frequent and long-term breaks during academic sessions provides various benefits to the
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students
.
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However
the
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advantages
of long-term brakes are eye-catching and benefit the scholar during a long run in their life and progressing their
overall
development.

IELTS essay Some people think frequent short vacations are good while others argue that long term locations are helpful. discuss the advantages and disadvantages of both and give opinion.

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346 words
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