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Some people think competitive sports, such as football, are valuable because they can gather people with different ages and cultures together. Some think competitive sports can cause problems because people are from different groups and countries. Discuss v.4

Some people think competitive sports, such as football, are valuable because they can gather people with different ages and cultures together. Some think competitive sports can cause problems because people are from different groups and countries. Discuss v. 4
People are calling into question the usefulness of competitive sports. Whilst a number of people underscore the importance of competitive sports as a rewarding contentious topic in favour of a wide variety of public, others advocate that it tends to be problematic this type of sports which makes conflict among people. There are rational arguments on both sides of this controversy which will be discussed in detail, followed by my own take on the matter. On the one hand, the most compelling reason is that competitive sports are a cornerstone of flourishing one' s mental and physical abilities. That is to say, inextricably intertwined with other aspects of personality, sports are believed to be a lever to the recognition of capabilities of individuals by nurturing and working on them with all ages in various cultural background. More specifically, when a person tends to take part in a rivalry he should work out on specific skill eventually leading to improvement in the mental power. Such a person can display acumen in facing demanding situation and take decisive action in a dilemma due to learn to deal with in a difficulty. Therefore, rivalry allows people leaning soft skills such as making judicious and rising to a challenging circumstance. On the other hand, others put forward an argument that competitive sports may prove some drawbacks to people. Simply put, some of these competitors which their home country suffering from crippling sanction when faced with another competitor is bound to take revenge and follow their social ambition. Take Iran and the United States of America as the most obvious patently example; in free fighting competitions, participates invite each other by the internet to fight on the field. As a result of this, competitive sports have a far-reaching effect on rising conflict and tension between people from different countries. To conclude, the benefit accruing from competitive sports are by no means negligible, it is my firm conviction that in some cases it would be a causative factor to make a new enemy.
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are calling into question the usefulness of
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competitive
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sports
. Whilst a number of
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people
underscore the importance of
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competitive
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sports
as a rewarding contentious topic in
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favour
of a wide variety of public, others advocate that it tends to be problematic this type of
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sports
which
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makes
conflict among
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people
. There are rational arguments on both sides of this controversy which will
be discussed
in detail, followed by my
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own
take on the matter.

On the one hand, the most compelling reason is that
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competitive
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sports
are a cornerstone of flourishing
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one&
#039; s mental and physical abilities.
That is
to say,
inextricably
intertwined with
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other
aspects of personality,
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sports
are believed
to be a lever to the recognition of capabilities of individuals by nurturing and working on them with all ages in various cultural background. More
specifically
, when a person tends to
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take part
in a rivalry he should work out on specific
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skill
eventually
leading to improvement in the mental power. Such a person can display acumen in facing demanding situation and take decisive action in a dilemma due to learn to deal with in a difficulty.
Therefore
, rivalry
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allows
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people
leaning soft
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skills
such as making judicious and rising to a challenging circumstance.

On the
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other
hand, others put forward an argument that
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competitive
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sports
may prove
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some
drawbacks to
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people
.
Simply
put,
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some
of these competitors which their home country suffering from crippling sanction when faced with another competitor
is bound
to take revenge and follow their social ambition. Take Iran and the United States of America as the most obvious
patently
example; in free fighting competitions, participates invite each
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other
by the internet to fight on the field.
As a result
of this,
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competitive
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sports
have a far-reaching effect on rising conflict and tension between
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people
from
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different
countries.

To conclude
, the benefit accruing from
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competitive
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sports
are by no means negligible, it is my firm conviction that in
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some
cases it would be a causative factor to
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make
a new enemy.
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IELTS essay Some people think competitive sports, such as football, are valuable because they can gather people with different ages and cultures together. Some think competitive sports can cause problems because people are from different groups and countries. Discuss v. 4

Essay
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4 paragraphs
337 words
6.0
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