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some people think at school teachers should use films, computers, internet instead of boring books . To what extent do you agree or disagree?

some people think at school teachers should use films, computers, internet instead of boring books. Pk6Xd
It is sometimes argued that instead of using dull textbooks schools ought to use films, internet and computers for instructing young pupil. I completely agree this statement and I will give my own opinion First of all, books are old-fashioned since it has been using for many centuries. For example, many centuries ago the first books began to be used. However, we are living in the 21st century and it is high time to use internet and computers. Furthermore, information can be taken from the internet much more than books. Because we know many types of information sources are exist in internet such as useful website, dictionaries, online classes and tests. That's why I believe that internet and television could be easier to understand for pupils. To conclude, books have been serving us for many years, but I think it would be better if we use internet, television and computers instead.
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IELTS essay some people think at school teachers should use films, computers, internet instead of boring books.

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