Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Some people state that of consumer goods result in damage of the natural environment. (1) What are causes and possible solutions?

Some people state that of consumer goods result in damage of the natural environment. (1) What are causes and possible solutions? N3Gm2
At the outset, I would like to mention that several people believe that buyers want to purchase more products which are damage environment. There are many problems created as well as some remedies to over-come of it. Same would be discusses further in ensuing paragraphs. To begin with, there are some reasons for happen this type of situation. The major reason is, there are many products are not degradable. By refer to this point; it has been observed that people buy may thing daily. There are many products are hard for degradation at means that several products are not recycle easily. These products not only damage environment, but also harm to human health. Some product take a more time for degradation and also, more costly to recycle. For instance, generally, people more use polymer and plastic product because this product affordable price avaible in market. But these product damage environment, not easily degradable, and harm to health. Moreover, companies owner make more product for fulfill customer requirement. To elaborate, many companies make more and more products their time organization needs many thing. Such as raw material, land, water and many more. Company expand unit their time needs more space. As a result, businessmen do deforestation. It also damage our environment. There are some route-causes to overcome of it. Government should make policy for lees use none-degradable product. In other words higher authority imposes to use non-cyclic product. Media must spread awareness to people for less consumes non-degradable things via news channel. To sum up, it can be finalized that consumer less use atmosphere harm products. Government make strict rule against seller and consumer. People should take care surrounding.
At the outset, I would like to mention that several
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
believe that buyers want to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchase
more
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
which are
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
damage
environment. There are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
problems created
as well
as
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
remedies to over-
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
of it. Same would be discusses
further
in ensuing paragraphs.

To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
with, there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
reasons for happen this type of situation. The major reason is, there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
are not degradable. By refer to this point; it has
been observed
that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
may
Did you mean the verb "think"?
thing
daily. There are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
for degradation at means that several
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
are not recycle
easily
. These
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
damage
environment,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
also
harm to human health.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
Did you mean "products"?
product
take a more time for degradation and
also
, more costly to recycle.
For instance
,
generally
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
more
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
polymer and plastic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
product
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
product
affordable price
Possible spelling mistake found.
avaible
in market.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
But
these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
product
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
damage
environment, not
easily
degradable, and harm to health.

Moreover
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
owner
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
make
more
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
product
for fulfill customer requirement. To elaborate,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
make
more and more
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
their time organization needs
Possible agreement error. The noun thing seems to be countable; consider using: "many things".
many thing
. Such as raw material, land, water and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
more.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Company
expand unit their time needs more space.
As a result
, businessmen do deforestation. It
also
Did you mean "damages"?
damage
our environment.

There are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
route-causes to overcome of it.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Government
should
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
make
policy for lees
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
none-degradable
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
product
.
In other words
higher authority imposes to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
non-cyclic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
product
. Media
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
spread awareness to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
for less consumes non-degradable things via news channel.

To sum up, it can
be finalized
that consumer less
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
atmosphere harm
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Government
Consider using third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: "makes".
make
strict
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rule
against seller and consumer.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
People
should take care surrounding.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay Some people state that of consumer goods result in damage of the natural environment. (1) What are causes and possible solutions?

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
278 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts