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Some people says that zoo's should be closed down and whereas other think opposite. Discuss both views and give your Opinion.

Undoubtedly, zoo is a facility that maintains collection of wild animals. It is highly controversial issue that whether zoo's should be shuts down or not. Personally, I opine that zoo's are helpful in protecting wild animals and some other birds. Let us deliberate both the notions along with my own perspective in upcoming paragraphs. There are myriad of reasons to shore light upon the former proclivity. To plunge into the most intrinsic one is that it prevent the extinction of unique animals. To justify, zoo's are helpful in protecting endangered animals. Due to different reasons, some species are extincting and zoo prevent the extinction of unique breeds of animals like lions, tiger and black dear by taking proper care of them. For instance, in chandigarh, had established a wide range of shelters, food and many other things are provided to animals. As a result, zoo's are required for nourishment of the dangerous and extinct species of animals.
Undoubtedly
, zoo is a facility that maintains collection of wild
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animals
. It is
highly
controversial issue that whether zoo's should be
Consider using the past participle “shut”.
shuts
down or not.
Personally
, I opine that
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zoo's
are helpful in protecting wild
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
and
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some
other birds.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Let
us deliberate both the notions along with my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
perspective in upcoming paragraphs.

There are myriad of reasons to shore light upon the former proclivity. To plunge into the most intrinsic one is that it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevent
the extinction of unique
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
. To justify,
Did you mean the plural instead of the possessive?
zoo's
are helpful in protecting endangered
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
. Due to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
reasons,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
species are extincting and zoo
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevent
the extinction of unique breeds of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
like lions, tiger and black dear by taking proper care of them.
For instance
, in
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chandigarh
, had established a wide range of shelters, food and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
other things
are provided
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
.
As a result
,
Did you mean the plural instead of the possessive?
zoo's
are required
for nourishment of the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
dangerous
and extinct species of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
.
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IELTS essay Some people says that zoo's should be closed down and whereas other think opposite.

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
157 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 5.5
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