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some people say that women should only stay at home and take care of their families. What do you think?

some people say that women should only stay at home and take care of their families. What do you think? GWnbg

It is often said that women should only be housewives and take care of their families. Being a modern girl, I totally disagree with that idea. First, ladies and men should have equal rights. If men can have a job, women can also do an occupation; Therefore, they will become more independent and reduce the financial burden for their husbands. Moreover, this can also decrease domestic violence since many men are under pressure because of money. Second, ladies should also go out more to interact with people around them since they shouldn't only communicate with their family members, and women should also build their relationships about business or friendships. Also, working mothers will be a good mirror for their children to look at and learn. In conclusion, women also have the right to earn money themselves.

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