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Some people say that the young people of a nation should work for the welfare of the society do you agree or disagree

Some people say that the young people of a nation should work for the welfare of the society rK6wk
Much of the world places premium on minors in one way or other and it has become a buzzword that they should do something for the betterment of the society which has become a crucial part of their life in this day and age. However, I completely agree with this view. My essay will delive into my notion and will bring a plausible conclusion. At the outset, needless to say that there are scores of agreement points supporting the view that juvenile should work for the welfare of society and the most remarkable one is that they are strong pillars of any country on which our entire society really on. To elaborate, youngsters are people between the age group, whose thinking and actions are quite strong. To exemplify, minors believe to work on ideas as soon as possible because they are keenly waiting for their possible results. So, in that case older people should encourage them to do good for the development of the nation. Therefore, there is no view against that is why an army people are convinced with it as motivating youngsters of the society in a good we will definitely shows result in positive way. Allied to it, more agreement points are rooted in the fact that youth is the new generation of any area. Masses also favour the same. In other words, the new generations have new ideas and concepts in their minds. If these ideas would be implemented in any region, then it leads to change in infrastructure and development of that area. For instance, a survey has been done in Nigeria in 2009, which shows that a state of Nigeria selected a juvenile in elections as their head. After that, the area is controlled according to the head which shows changes after four months in terms of development from the earlier years. Thus, these reasons makes a number of folk in favour of it. To recapitulate, after inspection of the above paragraphs one can see that it has plethora of benefits.
Much of the world places premium on minors in one way or other and it has become a buzzword that they should do something for the betterment of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
society
which has become a crucial part of their life in this day and age.
However
, I completely
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with this view. My essay will
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delive
into my notion and will bring a plausible conclusion.

At the outset, needless to say that there are scores of agreement points supporting the view that juvenile should work for the welfare of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
society
and the most remarkable one is that they are strong pillars of any country on which our entire
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
society
really
on. To elaborate, youngsters are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
between the age group, whose thinking and actions are quite strong. To exemplify, minors believe to work on
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ideas
as
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soon
as possible
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
they are
keenly
waiting for their possible results.
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So
,
in that case
older
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
should encourage them to do
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
for the development of the nation.
Therefore
, there is no view against
that is
why an army
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
are convinced
with it as motivating youngsters of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
society
in a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
we will definitely
The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: "show"
shows
result in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
way.

Allied to it, more agreement points
are rooted
in the fact that youth is the new generation of any area. Masses
also
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favour
the same.
In other words
, the new generations have new
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ideas
and concepts in their minds. If these
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ideas
would
be implemented
in any region, then it leads to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
in infrastructure and development of that area.
For instance
, a survey has
been done
in Nigeria in 2009, which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
shows
that a state of Nigeria selected a juvenile in elections as their head. After that, the area
is controlled
according to the head which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
shows
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changes
after four months in terms of development from the earlier years.
Thus
, these reasons
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
a number of folk in
Possible spelling mistake. 'favour' is British English.
favour
of it.

To recapitulate, after inspection of the above paragraphs one can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
that it has plethora of benefits.
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IELTS essay Some people say that the young people of a nation should work for the welfare of the society

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
337 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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